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Teen Poetry #3

Knocking On My Door . . .

DragonFang
Senior Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 522
Missouri, USA

0 posted 2000-09-03 01:19 AM

Death came knocking on my door
All I could say is why?
Cause Death came knocking on my door
Out the window I did fly

Death came though my door
Down the street I ran away
Cuase Death came through my door
Why was all that I could say

Death came down my street
Persued, I tried to flee
Cuase Death came down my street
Why can't you just let me be?

Death came for me in the end
I tried to seek out the way
Cuase Death came for me in the end
Death said I could not stay

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2000-09-03 08:55 AM

You've left me with visions of The Grim Reaper knocking at doors DragonFang. Without utilizing graphic or glorifying content, this leaves the reader to interpret many metaphoric possibilities here, well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

2 posted 2000-09-03 10:28 AM

this was wonderful
simple but also very powerfull
made me think and gave me some mental pictures
great work!

Love Ya Bunches
~Jen~

The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too
Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

3 posted 2000-09-03 06:43 PM

Wow...I must agree with Kit, this was very well written and very interesting. I like the differneces I'm seeing around Teen, keep em here!

Salma

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

4 posted 2000-09-03 07:59 PM

As always, wonderfully
thought provoking!!
You've done excellent
with this one!! Keep
it up I love your work!
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~

~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

DragonFang
Senior Member

since 2000-03-09

Posts 522
Missouri, USA

5 posted 2000-09-04 12:54 PM

thanks everyone, not enough energy to respond indivudually, but, thanks.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

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