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Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

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On the streets w/ people

0 posted 2000-08-25 02:09 PM

Suffering endless
emotions of love and hate
as the days go by

Ok, I just thought up this senryu a minute ago, so I figured I'd share

LoveBug

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1 posted 2000-08-25 03:33 PM

This is a great piece. You said it all, my friend.

(PS- Is a senryu the same thing as a haiku? I was just wondering. Forgive my ignorance!

)

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

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Twilight Zone

2 posted 2000-08-25 06:50 PM

could you explain to me what a senryu is?

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31

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3 posted 2000-08-25 07:10 PM

I too am curious...I'm guessing they are the same because the syllables in a Senryu match that of a Haiku. (5-7-5) At any rate, I agree with Love Bug...You said it all!! Keep it up! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Why is it that love always
starts with a HuG
grows with a kIsS
and ends with a TeAr?!?~*~

Alwye

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In the space between moments

4 posted 2000-08-26 01:47 AM

A senryu has the same format as a haiku, with the 5-7-5 syllable set up. The difference is that a haiku is based on nature, while a senryu isn't.

And by the way, this is a wonderful senryu! So much can be said with so few words...

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

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On the streets w/ people

5 posted 2000-08-26 11:28 AM

Thanks for replying with the answer, my internet went out yesterday

so I'm just getting on. And thanks everyone for your replies!! I appreciate them

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28

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6 posted 2000-08-27 10:28 AM

Seems I must of missed this one yesterday, but it's wonderful btw. And now that I know what a senryu is...it makes it all the more delightful

Salma

Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28

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7 posted 2000-08-27 12:59 PM

Few words full of meaning...wonderful

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01

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State of Despair

8 posted 2000-08-27 08:18 PM

Sounds great... great idea! This is exactly what life is. I want to see more of these...

~Jeremy~

"I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering,
I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection."
~DMX~ "Prayer III"

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people

9 posted 2000-08-28 10:08 AM

Thanks everyone for the replies!

Allan Riverwood

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10 posted 2001-03-30 04:19 PM

Great job! You know how I feel about senryus. It's wonderful to read a few more, for a change of pace.

~Allan

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