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The Kiss (repost) |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Only God knows what to do with this kiss, Because I am unworthy to feel more. The powdery soft lips say so much more than you think. Playing games with your heart, I mean not to harm you, I'm afraid of letting go, I'm afraid it'll mean so much more. Crying on your shoulder, Wishing things would change, I want to be what you need, I need to be what you want. * felt the urge to balance out my negativity...This is in rememberance of prettier times. |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
may i first say i really like the way you write. I've read about all of the many posts you put up and i'm impressed. The way you express your feelings is wonderful. It's a great break from the formulated poetry i oftain see. Your style is written as if you were talking to yourself and just wrote as you were talking. I believe this is one of the best ways to write if you can do it. Just capture the feelings as they come out of your head. Great writting. There's a fine line between genius and insanity. I have erased this line. -- Oscar Levant "Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live." |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
jenn~~~this is a good poem but there is one thing that i dont like...Passionslaying games with your heart, i mean no harm to you"...if your playing with someones hurt it does do harm even if you dont mean it... ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
of course you harm them by playing with their heart! That is really the point... playing with their feelings unintentionally, you hurt them, you don't set out to toy with them... do you get it? Like you're with someone and they feel more than you do, or you think that they do... so you're unintentionally playing or 'toying' with their emotions but you don't want to hurt them by leaving them, so you just stay and hurt them anyway... lose lose sitch, you see? |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Awsome poem I wish I could write as good as you but that will never happen.Keep up the great work. Lauren |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome poem... great job jen i like the thoughts and emotions in here keep writing..  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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