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Teen Poetry #3

You said (Please Read)

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2000-08-23 08:11 AM

You say I've changed,
I'm not the same,
this is not the me you know.

You say you don't know how,
or why,
but now you have to go.

You say you need,
to be near me,
but not when I'm like this.

You say these things,
and I wonder how,
my life changed with just one kiss.

You say you saw,
a different side,
of me you've never seen.

You say you see me,
all the time,
not only when you dream.

You say you need some space,
to straighten,
to fix your life.

You say you need to deal,
with all the pain,
and strife.

You say my life is easy,
and I don't
understand.

You say my dreams will all come true,
I'll see,
and you take my hand.

You say goodbye,
but you don't leave,
you don't want to loose.

You say you've lived,
an unfair life,
you never got to choose.

You say you need to see me,
before you have to go.

But you never said I love you,
and that's what I need to know.

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2000-08-23 10:21 AM

This is a very beautiful poem...Keep writing Allysa.

"But you never said I love you,
and that's what I need to know"

I love this line

As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Lovely_Kris
Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 176

2 posted 2000-08-23 03:53 PM

Wounderful poem. I think a great poem and keep writting. Keep up the great work.
Lovely_Kris

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

3 posted 2000-08-24 01:03 AM

this is wonderful work...agree with acire on thos last two line....very nicely put. but the situation seems kinda tough....maybe what you should do no matter how it hurts is help him adjust his life, even if he can't say he loves you right now...give him time to figure it out. if i'm right than that's my advice....if i'm wrong as usual, than i wish you good luck!

salooma

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