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the other day
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the other day |
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JR Junior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 22morris il |
the other day is not a love poem or a love lost poem its just about life. The other day The other day it was there, this feeling I couldn't hide, now today its gone,but i don't know where or why. If you seen me the other day you would understand. I hope you can help me find it. I just dont understand... Quite where it went, you see, it just sorta disapeared, I knew it would eventualy, but its something I always feared. Now I'll spend my time finding it, time is irrelevent anyways. I don't care how long it takes, I will find it one of these days. The other day I laughed a lot, now all I do is cry. If you seen me the other day, you'd prabably ask me why... I'm crying now? Not too much has changed, but the other day I had it, now I don't. My freedom. --JR "two roads diverged in a wood and I... I took the one less traveled by... ...And that has made all of the difference." --Robert Frost |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is very well written, it's kind of suspensful waiting to see what has changed. Keep up the awesome poetry! |
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Emmaline Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15 |
JR ~ I really liked this poem! I, too, liked the suspense. As I was reading it, I didn't know what you were saying had disapeared. I could make all this guesses, like your innocence. I like that I could do that. I like how whoever reads it can form their own thoughts, and at the end, can come to the realisation. Good work. ~ Emma |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
well...here's somethin' I've never read of yer's before...but as it always goes, I know what I like and what I don't...and this...I like...keep it flowin man. Jeremy "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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