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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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~*Falling Too Fast*~ I thought I met, the guy in my dreams. He was virtually perfect, atleast thats how it seems. I knew my heart, was falling way to fast. But i kept telling myself, this is going to last. He loves me I said, or so i thought. It was his love, that my heart so hungerly sought. I guess the feeling wasn't mutual, because now im all alone. I tell myself, "he's going to call!" as i sit all day clinging to the phone. It's been 2 weeks, since I last heard your voice; felt your touch. The sparkle in my eyes is gone, I'm missing you so much. I set myself up for a heartbreak, there's no one else to blame. I was falling too fast, now I'll never be the same. **I happen to do this alot, fall to fast. This really isnt a good poem either lol i bet u guys are getting tired of these krappy ones. sorry! i just write whats on my mind, sometimes in a hurry. but i'll write a good one here shortly!  |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
DQ~~~you work is not crappy at all...i love your poems...hey even if poetry isnt your thing it doesnt matter...i know it isnt my things its just i like it...we all arent perfect and all of our poetry isnt perfect..anyways girl this is a good poem!!!i like it...just next time you get a new guy let him do the falling!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
wounderful poem! I think you did a great job and keep up the great work. I hope to read more of your work and by the way your work isn't crappy. keep up the great work. Lovely_Kris |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You're very good at expressing your feelings, and that's all it takes to make good poetry. I loved this one, thanks for the chance to read it  |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
HEY GUYS! Thanks so much for replying! I swear ya'll are so POSITIVE! LOL i know ure just dying to say something negative But thanks for the support! Luv ya'll~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is actually a great write. why do you sell yourself short. i'd be the first to say if i don't like it, believe me keep writing and i promise to keep readingAs i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I agree with the others DancinQueen ... don't sell yourself short! This is well written, with a good flow and rhythm. You're quite talented, so keep up the good work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Been in your shoes before, and on the other side of the phone, the one you were waiting on. Neither side is pleasant to be on, your side the least. Let love find you, don't seek it. Thomas A. Plemmons Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire! I didnt know you bumped this one, too! thank you so much u r so sweet Kit~~>i guess i'm just really criticle of my work TAP2~~> well im trying not to seek it..i wish it'd find me quicker! "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I loved it!! You are way too critical!! You are quite talented and I for one can say this is excellent.It's nice to see you again. Keep writin 'em and I'll keep readin 'em! < !signature--> If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-19-2000).] |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Really, it's not crappy, only you think that. Well, as to your situation I can't give much advice, other than there will be other guys. Don't you just love that one? It makes no sense at the time, but I guess it does later aye? Keep your chin up and keep writing Bel Beautiful is empty Beautiful is free Beautiful loves no one Beautiful stripped me -"Beautiful" CREED |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Oh wow guys!! I posted these poems forever ago..and acire bumped them all. thanks so much everyone..means alot to have you reply! ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
 i feel ur pain, i know exactly what u r feeling, or what u r expressing in ur poem. i got hurt the same way, and trust me ur pain isn't near what mine was, or what i was privelleged to. keep smiling and trust me, eventually u will move on and hate him! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Oh i've felt ALOT more pain...i've written a couple other poems that express that very well. thanks for the kind words ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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