Teen Poetry #3 |
Careless love |
sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
the sandman seems to have forgotten his magickal dust this night silken pillows cannot seem to calm the restlessness you have created winding free from their feathery grasp is the intoxicating scent of your skin it seems my bed is not the only thing holding onto the warmth of a fading memory i wonder as to where you have gone and whom this night finds in your arms salty tears trail down my check wishing the sandman wasn't so careless even though deep down i know my dreams will be filled with your smile "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
wounderful poem and I hope to read more of your work. I think you did a great job. Lovely_Kris |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is a great expression of your feelings, thanks for sharing it with us wishing the sandman wasn't so careless even though deep down i know my dreams will be filled with your smile |
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Emmaline Junior Member
since 2000-08-20
Posts 15 |
sorrowfulangel ~ I really enjoyed this poem. It conveyed this feeling of sadness and loss. It gave me a feeling of lonliness. But this was a really great piece of work, and I hope to read more soon. ~ Emma |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey! this was really good. so sad. flowed really nicely. keep up the great work, cant wait to read more* ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
This is totally a wonderful the way you have summed up these feelings. And my situation isn't that I no longer have my love, but it's the case that he is so far away and I will fall asleep and cry for him. This poem just sums up everything..thank you for sharing this It has touched me "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
wow this was so good!!!i liked it alot...sounds like you are on the sad side today...and im sorry to hear that...keep up the good work!!! ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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