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sorrowfulangel
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since 2000-06-29
Posts 59
Memphis,TN

0 posted 2000-08-20 10:55 PM


the sandman seems to have forgotten
his magickal dust this night
silken pillows cannot seem to calm
the restlessness you have created
winding free from their feathery grasp
is the intoxicating scent of your skin
it seems my bed is not the only thing
holding onto the warmth of a fading memory
i wonder as to where you have gone
and whom this night finds in your arms
salty tears trail down my check
wishing the sandman wasn't so careless
even though deep down i know
my dreams will be filled with your smile






"god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways"

© Copyright 2000 Chelsie - All Rights Reserved
Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

1 posted 2000-08-20 11:08 PM


wounderful poem and I hope to read more of your work. I think you did a great job.
Lovely_Kris

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
2 posted 2000-08-20 11:12 PM


This is a great expression of your feelings, thanks for sharing it with us

wishing the sandman wasn't so careless
even though deep down i know
my dreams will be filled with your smile

Emmaline
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since 2000-08-20
Posts 15

3 posted 2000-08-20 11:23 PM


sorrowfulangel ~ I really enjoyed this poem.  It conveyed this feeling of sadness and loss.  It gave me a feeling of lonliness.  But this was a really great piece of work, and I hope to read more soon. ~ Emma
DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
4 posted 2000-08-20 11:32 PM


hey! this was really good. so sad. flowed really nicely. keep up the great work, cant wait to read more*  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

JnR4eva
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since 2000-08-07
Posts 377
Bronx, NY
5 posted 2000-08-21 01:42 AM


This is totally a wonderful the way you have summed up these feelings.  And my situation isn't that I no longer have my love, but it's the case that he is so far away and I will fall asleep and cry for him. This poem just sums up everything..thank you for sharing this    It has touched me  

"my love is my motivation
my love is my inspiration
perception of this poem
is your interpretation"
-- me



Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-08-21 01:59 AM


wow this was so good!!!i liked it alot...sounds like you are on the sad side today...and im sorry to hear that...keep up the good work!!!

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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