Teen Poetry #3 |
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In the End (by jeremydraul and Salooma) |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Untitled (I guess we forgot to name it! Give us title suggestions...) Deep, deep as my heart will go Deep as the seas will roll Deep as the skies will grow Love, love as much as will do Love as the river so calmly Love as time goes by you True, true as my words are True as the spreading streams True as a shooting star Faith, faith as my passion will show Faith as in the deep night skies Faith as hope's special bestow End, end as lakes in winter freeze End as this world will end so soon End as death will someday seize By jeremydraul and Salooma [This message has been edited by Salooma (edited 08-18-2000).] [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:06 AM).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow. You two are amazing together. I really suggest you do more! As for a title, I'm really not in a creative mood right now, so I'll let somebody else suggest 'em ![]() |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
oops, i didnt know it didnt have a title! im sorry babe! uhm, lets try something like... "Deep Love is True with Faith in the End", haha, just kidding.... If you didnt get it, I used every stanzas first word.. anyways, how 'bout "In the End" or something along those lines.... love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
lakewalker~ thanks for your kind comments, we both appreciate it! jeremy~ you know i thought of that too...first word of every stanza, great minds think alike, eh? In the End is good I'll change it... Salooma |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
salooma and jeremy~~~i dont know how i passed this poem up but i did...and i am soo very sorry...you two did a good job together!!!i have a title suggestion but i dont really think it will go with the poem..."The Depth of My Heart"...i dont know though...i dont think it would go with it...but hey im trying to help!!!ooops i didnt know yous had a title already...< !signature--> ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-18-2000).] |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Beautiful collaboration. Hope you decide to write more together. I'll be waiting. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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