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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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Morning, I awake, with this burden It cant be forgotten, it exists The sun rises and drys my tears The pain of missing you persists Afternoon, I walk, with a passion I search for you, your not here The air goes dry and my spirits gone Because your in my mind my dear Night, I sleep, a heavenly dream Sweet thoughts, you enter my paradise I wish you'd never leave but it's time With my luck, it's like rolling the dice I havn't posted anything in a few days, I hope this conquered writer's block. Tell me what you think. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
hey babe...where are ya? i haven't read you in a while, this was absoulty beautiful though, one of your best to tell ya the truth!! i love the morning, afternoon, and night exquisite and brilliant, write me soon.... salooma |
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MelissaL Junior Member
since 2000-08-13
Posts 22Joshua Tree, CA, US |
Whoa...sweet sweet poem! I can relate to it somewhat. I love your style and the way you covered the whole day throughtout the poem. Please keep up the good work. with much love mel  |
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GodsPerfktAngel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28Ohio |
Where have you been?!?!? I missed reading your poems.This is one that I wil remember b/c so many people go through that. Well any way good poem!!!!  |
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GodsPerfktAngel Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 28Ohio |
Where have you been?!?!? I missed reading your poems.This is one that I wil remember b/c so many people go through that. Well any way good poem!!!! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Great poem! You must be a really sweet guy......keep it up! Bel |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece! I'm glad you conquered your writer's block, and I wish you better luck in your love life. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Hey, I likes this way much... I may be a newer member, but i do look forward to seeing more of your poetry... Love, Kristi "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, great poem  |
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