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Tangomage New Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 7 |
A man sits at a table wondering what to do. He wonders where he's going, Wonders where he's been. The past had so much strife And the future so much uncertainty. He finished his coffee and left a tip, Took a right at the cash register, And walked out of the door. A trenchcoat and a hat were all that Protected him from the pouring rain. His eyes were fixed to the ground As he walked on the cold, damp sidewalk. No one knew him, no one talked to him. Why? He did not know. That's the way it was. He had no friends, no wife, no children, Nothing to call his own. The rain hit the ground like So many opportunities missed. He could only hear this, And the sound of his aching heart. Too many regrets, too few glories, To fill a lifetime of misspent days. He had seen the sun rise that morning. That night was the last he saw it set. No one will notice, No one will remember. The end has come, no more to say. It's too late to change things. Every man dies, but not every man really lives. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! This poem is so sad. I can't imagine someone living and dying, and no one caring. It's works like this that remind me to care about everyone. Thank you for sharing it with us! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Welcome to Passions. quite a way to step foot in the door with this one. very dark and gray. great images. and a very subtle implication in the end. very clever. i will read more of your posts. i hope you stay hear at passions is long and helpful. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear tangomage, i'd like to echo what lovebug and ethan_halo have said in regard to welcoming you to passions... this is certainly a poem of high quality... i particularly like the lines about the rain hitting the ground "like so many opportunities missed"... very thematically descriptive... i love lines like that... hope to see more of your work in this forum in the future... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
The rain hit the ground like So many opportunities missed I love those lines too. This was a great poem, one of my favorites, and I've been here for awhile. Welcom to Passions, and what a way to make an entrance  ! Can't wait to read more.~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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