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A Decision |
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Maxine New Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 6Forestville, Maryland |
I've decided to move on Even though it was hard to do I've decided to move on Cause there's no way I can have you I've decided there's not a chance To get you in my arms I've decided I have no luck For you to keep me from harm I've decided not to cry Even though the tears fall from my eyes I've decided to go on And not worry about the sighs I've decided to find another To replace the one I lost I've decided to look away And not worry about the cause I've decided to do all these things to get you off my mind Cause a person like you is so hard to find Andrea Maxine c/o 2001 |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
I know moving on is a tough desicion to make but sometimes it has to be done. Just hang in there. This was well written though. So i hope you keep it up. Jeanna  "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
This was really well written and I know how you feel, just hang in there . The only thing I can offer it to count your syllables, some of your lines were a little bit choppy. But it was really really good .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's hard to move on sometimes, but it has to be done. You can't live your life in the past, and it's good that you see that. Good writing. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Estrella New Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 8 |
I find this poem very relevant to what I'm going through now. I think I'll have to agree that it's really time to move on, and it's no use pursuing the impossible. When one door closes, another opens, so you may find that this decision was not such a bad one after all! |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear maxine: i can see this is from the heart... and an aching heart, at that... but i can't help but be amused somewhat by the irony in this poem... sixteen lines are spent talking about the hurt this person has caused you and why you have MORE than good reason to forget about them and "move on", yet the final two lines betray your true feelings and the fact that you cannot simply move on until some degree of healing has taken place... i hope that you aren't ignoring the pain and that you're finding the comfort and help you need in times of heartache... if nothing else, feel free to email me anytime... it's novacaine_for_the_soul@hotmail.com... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
These days it seems that so many people are experiencing this awful and uneccasary feeling of tormenting heartache and emptiness. I can't begin to tell you how much I relate to this poem,or even how good it is. I agree with the little pieces of chopiness, but otherwise your doing great! Micale |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Moving on I guess is a very tough decision...it can change life unless its done with lot of strength..a strength never to look back..a strength to accept whatever fate has to offer.. It was a good read but li'l of a poetic rhymes..it was to the point. Sincerely A_L |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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