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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*one in a series of 'Immortal Women' poems.... Chimera awoke before the dawn Quickly gathered her sword and shield Their enemies were sighted nearby And their land they would not yield Immortal clan of women, they, Fiercely protecting their fold Forced to defend themselves From mortals young and old Their offspring left two days ago To hide in a mountain cave Warrior women standing now Vowed no man would claim them slave Battle cries piercing break of day Mounting on their fiery steeds Riding now to surprise the intruder Hoping this ploy succeeds. The surprise they intended Was not theirs but mortal man For they were hidden outside of camp And knew of this sunrise plan Immortal women die only thus By sword thrust to the heart Sixty women lay dead by noon Piled on the gravediggers cart Chimera, fallen behind a tree, Hidden by a fallen branch Sole survivor of her clan Cowardice her only chance. The cart drew the bleeding bodies To the lake know as the ‘Weerin’ No trees would grow in brackish land It lay desolate and barren One by one her sisters were thrown Into the water of black opaque Chimera watched in silence No sound did she make When the mortals left the place Amidst cheers of victory The did not notice one immortal girl Creep forward stealthily The immortal sisters watery grave Beckoned Chimera in her woe She stood upon the bloody shore Vowing vengeance to her foe She slid into the lake of souls Taking the suffering she found there Now she was leader of the clan Accepting her fate with a prayer She vowed to seek the mortals To spill their blood upon the ground As she stood amongst the dead The valley heard her wailing sound Miles away the mortal army heard The howling of the Immortal Queen Blood ran cold upon their hearts At the grieving Chimera’s keen She walked for days to the mountain Finding her sisters well and alive None more than fourteen years old Her destiny to teach them to survive |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
This is extrordinary!! Im going back to read it again!! Love your work!! Such a vision, Great job!!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Chilling! I love it! It has a wonderful sense of story. -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
PdV...I'm at a loss for adjectives. I find no words to praise, no words to describe my feelings. This is so unique, so....so....words fail me still. More...I must see more. Hardrock |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Wow--I mean WOW!!! This was fantastic. I love your writing. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
SO WELL WRITTEN... simply charming work! If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
have to add i loved the name {chimera}for the warrior women...and just that are these the AMAZONS that you refer too? sorry if i sound weird but I read mythology and read something about these women who fight on their on and leave their children with their husbands very Intresting topic... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
As with all your writing - Simply Divine. This invites a Part II Deepak |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just superb deVine. . . Battle on warrior. .. ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Very strong piece of writing here Sharon!! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is extraordinary! Is it the first in the series? If not, where are the others? Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
It is not the first..it's the last one written, but surely not the last one! I will post them if you like or you can go to my website and see them - most of them are there... Thanks for your comments. http://www.poetdevine.com |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
I was wondering abt the same thing as Avanti. It did remind a little of the Amazons. But truly, this is a brilliant piece of work. I just love the mythical feel abt it! |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
PdV you truly are. I loved this. It left me speechless. Kethry Kethry. as soon as you feel too old to do a thing. Do it! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I love these stories, the take you to another world, you could make a book of them. Beautiful.. |
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Chere Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 18 |
This poem truly inspires a wonderful thought in me. You see, I have a lovely sister to whom your expression unfolds. And so it is quite lovely indeed imagining how words of splendid imagery can pave a path to the gate of truth . . . even if only fleeting* Thank you . . . vividly eloquent* Chere* |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
oh wowwwww wow wow!!! you make me want to run and read the clan of the cave bear series all over again!!!!!!!! and this is why you are an administrator, my poetic friend. just amazing. you should hold your head high, for you are a POET DE VINE!!!!!  kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You blow my mind! :dizzy: She said burn ... together. |
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