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three year olds pride |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a poem about my little brother Zack who is three. My Little brothers pride Is His slip N slide He had more fun under The sun On that thing Then anyone could ever Know And when he talked about it He glowed And It showed His pride His slip N slide I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeremiah, Well done. Simply beautiful writing here!!  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Nice job JJ...simple, childlike..appropriate for the subject. Hardrock |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I see the image with my grandson..the little things that bring such joy!! Thanks for sharing! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this is precious jaybean!!! how special he will feel when he is 33 and reads this wonderful poem!! great work hon!! kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Wonderful, Jeremiah! I love it. I can imagine his happiness! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~"His pride His slip N slide"......classic!!! Love that. hehe. Good one Jeremiah. My mind is smiling after reading that one. Be well J. *Peace. |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
Adorable work...how sweet it is to observe the innocent world of the very young. I like it. "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
nice work... short and appropriate If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very cute...enjoyed it!!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
JJ. Kids are so simple. You have put to words the simplicity of thier lives. I wish I could return to my: Slip-N-Slide Good Job. LarBear |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great poem!! Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
how sweet to write this for your brother ...well done. EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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