Dark Poetry #2 |
The Gleaners |
Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
With the next gasp of delicate air That we fight for with each passing breath We steal what remains of our share As we bring ourselves closer to death And the loves that we've wondered away Caress shadows of sound and of light As we ask what there is left to say In the vast open fields of the night In the shadows of summers now past And the sepia stained walls of our youth We hunt and we search to the last For the mis-shapen seeds of the truth |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
All I can say is WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOOOOOOOOOOOOTTT Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
"And the sepia stained walls of our youth" Great line! Good expression here! Enjoyed your poem very much. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Now that was GREAT! Keep up the work. |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
you write of the mystery that inspires us to write and what you say causes much delight even though it comes from the dark cold nite |
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Magebeast Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 60 |
You leave me wishing to read more. I can't wait for your next poem. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Simply awesome.. "Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly." author unknown |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Ditto X 6. Great stuff here Ian...can't wait to see more. Hardrock |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Yes, this is really good. And I agree with Tara about the line: "And the sepia stained walls of our youth" Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ian - this rocks! Beautiful, graceful writing... one to be proud of K |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Excellent writing. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
very very thought provoking,i love seeing older poems showing up again,good bit of poetry here!! swamp "All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon |
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michellemckee Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 49Tucson, AZ |
Simply breathtaking. Encore!!! Life is not a spectator Sport! Dance like no one's watching. Love like it's never going to hurt. |
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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 197Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A. |
Imagine my surprise when I found that this piece had been dragged out and dusted off! It's a good thing too. Re-reading it has reminded me to not give up. I will not wonder away this love. Thank you all. Sing while you may -The Prophet Qa'sepel Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen -The Prophet Qa'sepel |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Wow, i really enjoyed this it was very good "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN "There is no always forever, just this"-the cure |
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