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firejerm
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since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA

0 posted 2000-07-19 10:42 PM


Before the first snow
I want to leave this place
To get off a plane
And just see your face.
Before it gets cold
I want to hold you tight
And just know
That everything will be all right.

Before the first snow
I have to find a way
To get us together
Long before the cold days.
Before it gets cold
I want you by my side
And no that there is nothing
For us to hide.

Before the first snow
And the ground dies out
I just want to know
Without any doubts.
That this is resolved
And again we will be
A winter without you
I just cannot forsee.

Before the first snow
Prior to angels being made
I want to rest within you
Under the cool shade.
I cannot face this
The wretched cold alone
Each day passing by
My heart turns to stone.

Before the first snow
I must leave here forever
And come to you
So we can be together.
The leaves wilt brown
So they can fall and die
I'm tired of the days
When all I do is cry.

Before the first snow
Before the first bit of cold
I hope there is a happy ending
For us to have told.
I need you more
That you'll ever know
I'll never give up angel
It will continue to grow.

Before the first snow
Before the greying of the sky
I pray in my own way
Just don't ask why.
I close my eyes
So hard and so tight
Hoping that the next day
Maybe, just might.

Before the first snow
Before my bones are chilled
Please keep what we have
Before it is killed.
I need your gentle touch
Of your tiny hand
To be without you
Is more than I can stand...

Before the first snow
Take me where it's warm
And all these doubts
Shall halt their swarm.
The coldness creeps in
Upon my soul
You're my "happily ever after"
My only goal.

Before the first snow
Let me see your eyes
Maybe right then
I can make you realize.
My love for you
Is undying you see?
And that you mean the world
And more to me.

Before the first snow
Be my soul mate
Hold my hand
Here at heaven's gate.
For heaven I know
Is wherever you are
But right now love
It just seems so very far...

Please,
Before the first snow...

Jeremy T. Sellers
8/16/99
10:35 PM

Okay, sappy? yes, painful? yes, repetitive? yes, but it just goes to show how love makes us all fools at one time or another.  Recovered I have done!

Jerm< !signature-->

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe




[This message has been edited by firejerm (edited 07-19-2000).]

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taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

1 posted 2000-07-19 10:48 PM


Oh my! This is just THE BEST!   (I wish you had've put in a book submission - I would've voted!)  Terrific!   - words have escaped me!!  Well done Jeremy.
firejerm
Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217
Springfield, OH, good ol USA
2 posted 2000-07-19 10:52 PM


awww, thanks a lot!  It means a lot to me!!!

"Those little slices of death, how I loathe them."
-Edgar Allen Poe

Trisha4_u
Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28

3 posted 2000-07-19 11:09 PM


Before the first snow
Let me see your eyes
Maybe right then
I can make you realize.
My love for you
Is undying you see?
And that you mean the world
And more to me.

~~~~~~
.. this part really hit home with me.  One of the hardest lessons in loving another is that we cannot make them realize our love.  As they say ..Love is Blind!  
Very nice Jeremy!    lady RED

Trisha4_u
Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28

4 posted 2000-07-19 11:36 PM


  thanks ... done!  

[This message has been edited by Trisha4_u (edited 07-19-2000).]

lotharingia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
5 posted 2000-07-20 04:34 AM


This is absolutely brilliant and lovely and the repetition is just great!  

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo



Deborah1
Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
6 posted 2000-07-20 07:30 AM


Full of beautiful sentiments, what a lovely poem, filled with love, I could feel the desire to be with a loved one!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

taramw
Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738

7 posted 2000-07-20 09:31 AM


  Okie dokie... was I half asleep when I first saw your FANTASTIC poem? Or am I dreaming now?! LOL!  I have NOW voted for it!!!  Yipee!!  Hmm... maybe I just got so carried away with your beautiful words that is all I saw  
Hardrock
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
8 posted 2000-07-20 09:50 AM


Jeremy...brilliant.  Not only is it well constructed, it has such meaning to it.  Repetitive?  No way!!  Without the repetition of "Before the first snow.." the poem would not be the same.  Enjoyed it.  Hardrock
Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
9 posted 2000-11-04 12:16 PM


GREAT work!!  Okay ya caught me again, I went digging  
But holy!!  See you do write beautiful stuff.  This one put me in one of them "awwwwwwwww" moods!   But I disagree on one thing though.... love doesnt make us do foolish things.... love gives us reasons to grow.  


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


Cyndey
Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 84
Arkansas
10 posted 2000-11-04 11:16 PM


Jeremy Jeremy Jeremy...

I truely love reading your work! Like I told you in chat, this poem is truely awe-inspiring! It has such beauty and radiates so many differing emotions ...love, anger, pain, and saddness..and HOPE! You amaze me at times with the way your words seem to lock together and give such meaning!
***BIG HUG!!***
Blessed be dear-heart,

Cyndey


"All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream"
Edgar Allan Poe

Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
11 posted 2000-11-05 01:35 AM


Bravo well done.......the title is odd though, if that is the title hehe.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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