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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Before the first snow I want to leave this place To get off a plane And just see your face. Before it gets cold I want to hold you tight And just know That everything will be all right. Before the first snow I have to find a way To get us together Long before the cold days. Before it gets cold I want you by my side And no that there is nothing For us to hide. Before the first snow And the ground dies out I just want to know Without any doubts. That this is resolved And again we will be A winter without you I just cannot forsee. Before the first snow Prior to angels being made I want to rest within you Under the cool shade. I cannot face this The wretched cold alone Each day passing by My heart turns to stone. Before the first snow I must leave here forever And come to you So we can be together. The leaves wilt brown So they can fall and die I'm tired of the days When all I do is cry. Before the first snow Before the first bit of cold I hope there is a happy ending For us to have told. I need you more That you'll ever know I'll never give up angel It will continue to grow. Before the first snow Before the greying of the sky I pray in my own way Just don't ask why. I close my eyes So hard and so tight Hoping that the next day Maybe, just might. Before the first snow Before my bones are chilled Please keep what we have Before it is killed. I need your gentle touch Of your tiny hand To be without you Is more than I can stand... Before the first snow Take me where it's warm And all these doubts Shall halt their swarm. The coldness creeps in Upon my soul You're my "happily ever after" My only goal. Before the first snow Let me see your eyes Maybe right then I can make you realize. My love for you Is undying you see? And that you mean the world And more to me. Before the first snow Be my soul mate Hold my hand Here at heaven's gate. For heaven I know Is wherever you are But right now love It just seems so very far... Please, Before the first snow... Jeremy T. Sellers 8/16/99 10:35 PM Okay, sappy? yes, painful? yes, repetitive? yes, but it just goes to show how love makes us all fools at one time or another. Recovered I have done! Jerm< !signature--> "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe [This message has been edited by firejerm (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Oh my! This is just THE BEST!  (I wish you had've put in a book submission - I would've voted!) Terrific! - words have escaped me!! Well done Jeremy. |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
awww, thanks a lot! It means a lot to me!!! "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
Before the first snow Let me see your eyes Maybe right then I can make you realize. My love for you Is undying you see? And that you mean the world And more to me. ~~~~~~ .. this part really hit home with me. One of the hardest lessons in loving another is that we cannot make them realize our love. As they say ..Love is Blind! Very nice Jeremy! lady RED |
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Trisha4_u Junior Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 28 |
thanks ... done! [This message has been edited by Trisha4_u (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is absolutely brilliant and lovely and the repetition is just great! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Full of beautiful sentiments, what a lovely poem, filled with love, I could feel the desire to be with a loved one!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Okie dokie... was I half asleep when I first saw your FANTASTIC poem? Or am I dreaming now?! LOL! I have NOW voted for it!!! Yipee!! Hmm... maybe I just got so carried away with your beautiful words that is all I saw  |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Jeremy...brilliant. Not only is it well constructed, it has such meaning to it. Repetitive? No way!! Without the repetition of "Before the first snow.." the poem would not be the same. Enjoyed it. Hardrock |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
GREAT work!! Okay ya caught me again, I went digging But holy!! See you do write beautiful stuff. This one put me in one of them "awwwwwwwww" moods!  But I disagree on one thing though.... love doesnt make us do foolish things.... love gives us reasons to grow. No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Cyndey Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 84Arkansas |
Jeremy Jeremy Jeremy... I truely love reading your work! Like I told you in chat, this poem is truely awe-inspiring! It has such beauty and radiates so many differing emotions ...love, anger, pain, and saddness..and HOPE! You amaze me at times with the way your words seem to lock together and give such meaning! ***BIG HUG!!*** Blessed be dear-heart, Cyndey "All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream" Edgar Allan Poe |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Bravo well done.......the title is odd though, if that is the title hehe.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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