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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Pineapple Sands Pineapple sands in strands of her, the knowledge soaked and fermented, while pigeons top the list and numbers begin consuming all she was. They wrap her in their times and place tension between her eyes. For nights in courts of public recreation, swindling booths of insanity. Alarming numbers tug at clothing only found today. She fought for safety in yards of fish and tasted the grim truth before. She had it for breakfast that day. She woke to his raging presense and cried for the spoon to feed. To be taken with the sugar sweet and silently slip away, through blades of him, to puffs of you, to soft and yellow sun. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
SpitFire...What a day-brightener!! I love this...it's like a free-for-all at the confectioner's store. If I was a plagarist, I'd steal half a dozen lines for my own use. Because I'm not, I'll just print it to save for reading again later. Hardrock |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
Very imaginative and splashed with ideas... I like it. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Another dynamic poem, love it! "Keep dreams alive, for if dreams die, life is a broken winged bird that cannot fly." author unknown |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
SpitFire, a stunning poem, excellently written. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Spitfire, I loved this, but I'll be good too, no stealing lines...very creative, good work!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I'm not sure what it was about, but I liked it any way!(It gave the same effect as watching the movie Yellow Submarine at one in the morning) Great poem! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Wonderful kid. I love the lay out. just drifting in for a min. and pinapple caught my eye. love ya kid love and light. Joel.hhhhhhhoooooooowwwwwwwwwllllllllll I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Oh Spitfire, You truly do spit fires of excellence, never ceasing to amaze me!  How fantastic this is! What beautiful words: To be taken with the sugar sweet and silently slip away, through blades of him, to puffs of you, to soft and yellow sun. By Gum! PS Fantastic title! BTW, How's your cat doing? On the road to recovery I hope! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This poem was out of the world my friend . Great choice of words and how you twisted them. I enjoyed it. Ronl Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i can only reiterate what everyone else has said... this is so full of images. enjoyed the read!! excellent work as always. keep it up.!! kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well what can i say just another great piece from the SpitFire. i hope to read more soon and hope you keep it up my friend. loved the work. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SpitFire, This was excellent writing my friend. You have grown so much lately in your writing. So proud of you!!  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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