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Angel of Death, Watch Over Me
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Angel of Death, Watch Over Me |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Well this is only my third contribution, but I thought I'd take you through one out of my archive file. Though the sun outside shines My thoughts are clouded, The thunder roars In darkness shrouded. Birds outside sing their praise But all I hear is sorrow, Wondering if I can make Yet another tomorrow. The heat is intense But inside I feel so cold, Thinking of those things Which I've been told. A blue sky wanders In the heavens above, It can't tell me The true meaning of love. I dream of yesterday Oh so many times, When it was all so perfect There were no bad signs. Now I'm left to wander Aimlessly in my soul, Losing touch with reality Losing touch with my goal. A flower blooms bright But is had no comprehension, This burden that I feel This painful tension. The grass is so soft When my thoughts are hard, Indeed I've been dealt A deck of bad cards. No body really knows But they try to have a clue They don't realize That I still love you. Through lies and pain I still hold onto a dream, In my thoughts it will stay At least for now it seems. Remembering a time When devotion was there, Now you act like That you just don't care. I've lost so much Is there a thing to gain? I'll never trust again It causes too much pain. Someone I once knew A stranger to me now, Why did it all happen But most of all how? Somewhere down the road It all fell apart, Seeming I took your freedom And you took my heart. During the daylight I sit here and sigh, The lonely nights come And I still cry. Knowing betrayal Like nothing before, I asked for you love That and nothing more. You use to be content With that in mind, Maybe I got comfortable And with that a little blind. So I tried harder To show you I was real, It wasn't shared I guess For you didn't feel. My stupidity would tell me To take you back, If reconcilliation Was to be in our tracks. Something was there That last night you cried, When you said goodbye And our love laid down to die. Jeremy T. Sellers 5/14/98 4:39 PM Not my best, but a trip through pain indeed. "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Indeed it is a trip through pain. Shattered love sucks. I know your situation all too well. I really liked your poem. You didn't hold anything back while writing this. I commend you. *~Meredith~* It's so obvious That the promise Keeps me here Painting pictures where All the colors Disappear *Lit |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Meredith, very rarely do I hold back in my work. I'm SOOO glad you liked it, it means a lot to get postive feedback...I'm still a little shaky about all this  I was going through a time when I found out my girlfriend at the time was doing my best friend of 11 years who was married!!! |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
"I'll never trust again, it causes too much pain" What a line...and what a life. Learn to trust, Firejerm. Even if it causes pain, learn to trust. It's a sad and lonely life if you don't. Very well done...Hardrock |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Hardrock, I think you would be the first to agree, that when we hurt, we tend to, as writers, get over dramatic with our emotions. Once time has passed, we learn to ignore all the things we said we'd never do again. Read it for face value, not what my life is like. Trust me it has changed. Have you been there? Jeremy |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Well...one of the best on the beginning and ending of a relationship. Beautiful  .--the little one |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
my god. this is one of the poems that hits so close to home that is scary. this exact same thing happened to me. i still love her with all my heart. but she found another in my absance. i was gonna ask her to marry me. but alas that will only be a permenet memory. i feel your pain my friend. your not alone. great work Once upon a time there was a light in my life, now theres only love in the dark, There's nothing I can do, a total eclipse of the heart. |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
If this not be one of your best.....I can not wait to read what you think is!! This was wonderful...I could almost see the pain in your heart....felt it, all to well!! "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Okay YES I went digging again  This was so sad. I am sorry you had to go through such pain back then. But trusting can be easy if ya find the right one. Beautiful work Jeremy, DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Cyndey Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 84Arkansas |
Jeremy, again your work amazes me... I know trials like these are tough and dispairing but lessons indeed come from them! I know from personal experience that trusting is one of the hardest things to do but it must be done. I'm glad you have learned this lesson, and hope you find a love that will match your heart 3-fold! Blessed be dear-heart, Cyndey "All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream" Edgar Allan Poe |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow very powerful. When i read what inspired you to write this poem......i went into this internal rage. If there is something that I couldn't despise more......if there was ever and epitome of wrong doing and an evil encarnate......it'd be cheating. *screams at the top of his lungs and then regains composure* very well done!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Seems like I'm following Dopey tonight - and thinking some of the same things (scary) Well done - Christopher |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Excellent! Loved it! ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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