Dark Poetry #2 |
Slut |
Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I couldn't help but notice that disapproving look on your face as I told you what I let him do to me And you asked what I felt for him But when I told you simply, "nothing" You didn't look surprised, instead you didn't understand I said, "Lust and need are two killers for me, not to mention he was good with his hands." But oh how I hated knowing I was loved only for my tits and ass, although still craving the taste of affection You still don't know and I hope you never do As to why the girl with so many is left so alone Note: This was a reflecting moment....I'm not like this anymore. lol As unpleasent as it may be I don't like ignoring truth and I like looking at the past to see how far we've come so I'm sorry if I offended anybody in any way. I wish you could hear the child that cries in my flesh and makes my bones ache -Jewel ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Well done for telling it like it is. It's tough for men to hear from women what they so easily do and say themselves. Men are SO hypocritical about this kind of situation, they justify it easily when it's them, if a woman does it she's a slut - that's so much crap! Men, wake up to yourselves! This poem was great - keep on telling it straight! Allan |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Call me "allstate". On the serious side-- reflection is good for the soul they say, so yours should be much better now. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Thank you Allan & Prometheus! I wish you could hear the child that cries in my flesh and makes my bones ache -Jewel ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
That poem hit a nerve with me.....I enjoyed reading it! You made quite a point, too. So often people confuse sex with affection! Great work! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Personally I think the first reply was kind of kiss ass. There are just as many women who would have difficulty hearing this from men, as men would from women. I have been on that receiving end. This is great work. A little angry, a little needed! I hope to read more from you soon!!!!! Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, very soul baring, and you know what? I think all or darn close to all woman have had these experiences. I can see from the poem, that when you say you felt nothing you didn't actually feel nothing. You felt sad that you were not being loved. And even though things can be casual, it also hurts when you are discounted. Good for you if you have gotten stronger now. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
this is excellent excellent work. thank you for this. i wish every last one of my dancer friends could read this. i have been there so many times my damn self girl. a smart, eloquent slut is even worse. they really can't stand that. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
God, how I hate that word....but I loved the poem. As long as you feel, as long as you know, as long as you understand...you are not a slut. Temporarily promiscuous? Maybe. But sluts don't write like you do. Hardrock |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I think you express very well a feeling many people have when they jump from one lover to the other. Longing for love inside we pretend we are just doing it for fun. These are revealing words indeed: You still don't know and I hope you never do As to why the girl with so many is left so alone Great work! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Well you did not offend me at all. I think (hope) I am open to how someone expresses themselves. Promiscuity comes with reason..I enjoy your poems and think its always a good thing to express our feelings! |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow great poem. I was the same way a few years ago & I'm paying for it now. My boyfriend (1 year & a month) doesnt trust me as far as he can throw me! I love him more than everything & could never hurt him like that I've been hurt too much to do it to some1 i truly love but anyway enough about my great life great poem!! |
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**STAR** Junior Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 26San Diego, Ca. |
I like it. You are telling it like it is. I have never looked at it that way. I have always never thought why a woman does what she does. The old male way of looking at things is hard to get past. Thank you. |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Nice definition of a slut! --the little one |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
******* But oh how I hated knowing I was loved only for my tits and ass, ******* If you're refering to yourself here I'd just like you to know, I love you for all other reasons than this. I really enjoyed reading this one, mostly because you told it straight out how you felt. I've read your other poem "Sedona" to, it was a little hard for me to get, but I really liked the dialogue in, it was something else. Hope you're ok my friend ~Broken~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Good honest reflective writing from your heart and past experiences...men are sluts to...some names they go by would be gigolo, player...David Lee Roth has the coolest song titled "Just a Gigolo...James |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
And still others 'get with' someone hoping it'll lead to love, it is confusing enough without another being hypercritical. We all make mistakes and those that cannot or WILL NOT see that aren't worth time or thought. Also it's ok for men to play around or conquer or test the boundaries but not women???? That is certainly chauvinism at it's worst!!! Great peice hon I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Where does ignoring truth leave us? In stagnation and regression. Seeing the truth, about ourselves and the world around us, helps us improve, helps us change (hopefully for the better), and in the end, we're better of for it. It's painful, but... no pain no gain, to use a phrase not always true. On to the poem... can I get "I love it in French or Spanish" someone? In English it is getting old. *sigh* I did. For someone to love you only for your tits and ass is to not know the real you, and your many layers. As to why the girl with so many is left so alone Too true. No one takes the time to truely get to know anyone... even though they are crying out for someone to do so with them. ~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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