Dark Poetry #2 |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
she his only star he longs from afar to feel the breath to smell the hair to touch the skin of his only star he her only star she longs from afar to be the breath to be the smell to be the touch of his only star Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Uta, what a great poem! It is different to your others... If only they could get together!! |
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Portia Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 157 |
This is lovely, and sad. I want to ask why they are not together but I know as well as anyone how some loves simply cannot. I loved the rhythm of it. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~You express such a hunger from one star to the other and back again. Wow,...wonderfully written. Thanks. *Peace. |
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gothicmoth Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 89 |
This is sad when two beings want the same thing but don't realize it or can't have it. I like the mirror imagery. |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Very good read...I understand the distance between them!!! Well put. Thanx!! Click |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Tara, you are right, I do seem to have been writing poems of a different style lately. I don't know what's come over me! (see "She and I" in crit analysis, 'scusing the gratuitous advertising ). Gothicmoth, I've been feeling rather reflective recently Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I agree the imagery was excellent! Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This is excellent! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
What a great idea, this love from afar I've known, what a great idea... love it... Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a different style for you but if its working and paying off keep with it. it truely is a great piece of work. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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hunter Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 22lex,ky |
this reminds me of my son and his friend.i know what they both want but neither will go to the other so they will problely remain lone stars both shinning but apart.goodwork |
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tac Junior Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 28New Jersey |
Somemes we don't have to be so far away to long for someone who may want us also. Sometimes life or words just get in the way. When that happens we might as well be a million miles away from each other. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Thanks again folks! I'm glad you all liked it! And yes, tac, the distance is merely metaphorical. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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