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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Toxic Thanks to allan for the idea  If love is a virus Infect me now Let me inhale Your breath, your air Give me this disease Forever to share If love is a virus Poison me now Let me savour Your blood, your lips Give me this torment Forever to kiss Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hmm... a good way of putting it! I really like the phrase "If love is a virus"!! I thought it was!  "Let me inhale your breath"... well put!! I reckon this is one of your best ones Uta!  |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Reminds me of the old cliche..bitten by the love bug..I loved it, great idea and love sure can feel like a virus!!! Good work!!! Nostalgia is like a grammar lesson...You find the present tense..and the past perfect "Anonymous" |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh I like this one a lot. make that A LOT! I think this calls to be priinted, sent to my long distance guy, something... And I absolutely think love is a virus, takes you over, knocks you out, and goes away as suddenly as it came.. Sandra "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I'm dissapointed to find that this isen't a book submission! Darn! I would have voted for it in an instent! This poem is great, and you have confirmed what I thought as true for a long time- Love IS a virus! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Excellent work Uta! A nice feel of depth to this poem. (It really gets under the skin...) Allan [This message has been edited by allan (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'd like to second the post! Sounds good to me! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
lotharingia, really enjoyed this piece some wonderful images. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
yes oh yes lothie. may i be completely infected by this virus. and may no antidote or antibotic be created to cure me. excellent work here!!!!! loved it!! kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Uta...excellent. Clever. Total enjoyment. Hardrock |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Fantastic! Love this. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
what an unique way to describe Love..like the originality here |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Thanks everyone !!! Especially Allan Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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