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In the Universe |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA 
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In the Universe Like you I stare out windows, And search the nighttime sky. Looking for elusive answers, In a universe of "why". I stare out at the ocean, And search the calming sea. Looking for elusive answers, In the universe of "me". I stare into the shopping malls, And search the many places. Looking for elusive answers, In the universe of "faces". I stare into the raindrops, And search my deepest fears. Looking for elusive answers, In the universe of "tears". I stare into the darkness, And search places I won’t go. Looking for elusive answers, In the universe of "woe". But I won’t stare in mirrors, Nor search places where I might find, The answers to my questions, In the universe of "my mind". Marv Hardin 07/11/00 |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Marvin, this one is so unbelievably good. It makes me feel gnawed at inside. The escapism you present is so real: we search for answers, but we don’t really want to know the truth. Your work always reads so well, I get the feeling it was meant to be. The words have just been waiting to be put in their place by you. I admire the way you present such complexity with such (apparent) ease. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I must say this captures alot of what I do and feel..I can relate so well. Extremely well written, how many times there is avoidence within myself..Alot of "Lifes Carousel" Nostalgia is like a grammar lesson...You find the present tense..and the past perfect |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hm, more questions without answers. This could get discouraging. This poem was perfect, spoke for many, I'm sure. "The universe of why". And it never tells... "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Just leaning back in my chair admiring this writing here. Wow,...Hardrock, this leaves me thinking and who knows what that'll do. hehe. I really think this one is incredibly written and so full of truth, atleast for me. Looking in that mirror,....ouch. Sometimes what I 'see' isn't worth the heartache. Hope it's not that way for you. This poem kix!!! Take care. *Peace. ~Oh,..BTW, what's this I hear about you spreading rumors that I'm teetering on the edge of reality. haha. I'm taking you with me if I fall.  Ahhaahhaa. *Peace. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Great work Hardrock!  Peace Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
This poem is definitly from the universe of "wow", becase thats what I was saying to myself as I was reading it! Great job, as always! -Wren |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Dear Marv Wow! Another fantastic piece of literary art from a guy with an expressive gift. You never let me down. A wonderful piece as always - speaks right at one. Peace my friend. Sylvia |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Good read...Lookd good on my screen!! Read out loud very well.. Thanx !! I liked it!! Click |
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Cyndey Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 84Arkansas |
Hardrock... < !signature-->this is an amazing piece here! It brought visions to my mind of so many nights that I too have pondered such questions seeking answers then wondering if I truly wanted to know them. Great poem... Keep up the great work!  Cyndey "All that we see or seem, Is but a dream within a dream" Edgar Allan Poe [This message has been edited by Cyndey (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Great poem! Love this one! Great title too! |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Wow! So hard to find one's self among the "stuff and nonsense" Very well written. Wonderful read too! |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
Oops...!  [This message has been edited by Nancee (edited 07-15-2000).] |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
Absolutely marvelous. Though you present the unvanquishable quest, for there will always be more; I am transported to the only true place that I am the centre of the universe, where nothing else matters but everything else is part of me. Thanks for the diversion... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Who among us would entail truth, but that we fail and ne'er see the face of I in a mother's lullabye... Hardrock, you certainly need to spread your wisdom around in the other forums...for those of us who don't get 'here' often... regards, Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well i'm back for awhile and came to check your work out and this is great i really enjoyed it alot and it also expresses how i feel and all the many question i ask. i swear i'm like a three year old LOL. well i'm reading all your work i missed. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wow Hardrock this is AMAZING hon!! I can so relate for there have been times when I sit and stare at nothing yet everything and contemplate my existance in this world. I could so relate, and it was wonderfully thought out and written as always. Great work I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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