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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I cry tears of frustration I am slowly.. Sifting,drifting Riding the rhythum Glancing at time Im looking for My shooting star In the darkness of light Sleepy eyes Tired fingers.. The weight and pain of life Have consumed me |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Me too, Deb, know the exact feeling. Nice expression. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
"The weight and pain of life have consumed me"....know the feeling very well...and you expressed it even better. Hardrock |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I,too,understand.... Nicely put! Great poem! Esspecily the shooting star image. Good work! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Life can really wipe you out at times, you expressed it well. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
You words carry the weight they portray Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is an excellent piece. It gives me the impression that the person in the poem is somehow being dragged along by life, can't really get a hold on anything concrete: I am slowly.. Sifting,drifting Riding the rhythum Glancing at time wonderful! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'll get enough sleep when I'm dead...  |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
yes live doe's give us pain so don't it. and life is my only fear because i don't fear death. because life is so unfair. great piece enjoyed it much I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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