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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
"watashi...." silence silence as strong as smothering as divine as the heat of us As we lie together Next to destiny "watashi....." your lips quiet mine yet inflame my mind as your fingers trace the map of my soul walk the road to my heart "watashi...." Your eyes are always closed to the possibilitys of yourself "watashi......." "watashi......." "shhhh.....be quiet...." Who are you to tell me to be quiet? Let me hold you when you tell me that.... Night has darkened the sky There is no moon Oyasuminasai |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
I take it "watashi" and "Oyasuminasai" are Japanese? Since I'm not very good at that language  , I have no idea what they mean. However, the words sound lovely, from the context, I imagine "watashi" to be whispered. This poem is divinely sensual: simply beautiful! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Thank you! Yes..."watashi" and "oyasuminasai" are Japanese - good guess! My Japanese is very limited, but I love the language and I wanted to use some of it in a poem. "watashi" is actually a simple word, it means "I". I wanted the speaker to be on the verge of saying something very important, but being silenced. I also imagined the word as being wispered...very quiet and pretty. The word "oyasuminasai" means "goodnight" -Wren  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I am glad I had the explanation to read along with the poem... made it more enjoyable than having to wonder...lol... very soothing words Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
beautiful poem Wren, very gentle. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
I loved this! I indentified the Japanese right away ^_^ Beautiful poem, very tranquil. Ai yi. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Asahi, ku desai....cheers to you Wren..nice poem. and very sensual. Hardrock |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
hey--I like this one. It has so many beautiful descriptions of loving your partner...you paint a picture in my mind, which means you are an effective writer! I like "your lips quiet mine/yet inflame my mind" - my favorite lines. Good piece "We have all these galaxies inside of us. And if we don't enter those in art, then I don't understand the point in doing anything."-Sam Shepard |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
I too loved this one! |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
*sigh* I loved it! As I read it I felt my breath caught on the edge of saying something... "damn..." "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you for the explanation from me as well... this breathed quietly to me, as I think it was intended to do... domo arigato, thank you Christopher |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Wren,...love the way this read. So cool. .~kouiu ato itoshii ubuge isshu. *kyuui~ ~(Such a lovely and soft poem. *Peace).~ ~Oops, sorry, had to. .[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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