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Path of No Return |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Tripping down a darkened path, I cannot see the light. Doubts for the future pummel me, I know I have to fight. The urge to stay here in the dark feels like the better choice. I wonder if I cry out loud he'll even hear my voice. Dark has always been my friend, the shadows comfort me. But this far down, the path grows wild Not sure of what I'll see. Trees thicken as I stumble on, the branches scratch my hope. Don't know how much I can endure, no energy to cope. Far down, there is a slice of light attempting to peek through. It tells me I should carry on, though it's so hard to do. The light is love, the cure for all, the hope I badly need. The pain and sadness fading now, must follow where it leads. I need a guide to take me there, the light is hard to find. If someone will reach out a hand, I won't be walking blind. The trees still try to grab me as I push through toward the light. The doubts are there, I know how fast the day returns to night. Love beckons me to reach for it, I know I have to try. Maybe this time he'll shelter me. If not, I'll surely die... [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 07-07-2000).] |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
catalinamoon...Superb!!! Great read, I really enjoyed this one. I know you will reach the light if you follow the path. Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
the path to love is often difficult and painful, the more you try the harder it seems to get. the only thing anyone can do is try their hardest...none-the-less, your words are beautiful! i really enjoyed this poem. if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
An excellent poem, as always. And stick to that light, how ever remote it is, it will grow as you approach, don't let it get out of sight! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
The path we travel can be rough. and we don't always know where it will lead, but staying on course will get you there...eventually, awesome poem!!! |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Don't know how much I can endure, no energy to cope, forgot to post that I relate so well to that verse!! |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
I love the sense of hope that permeates this poem, even though the images themselves are somewhat bleak. I hope the speaker finds the love shes searching for! Great job, as usual!  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful writing-- Perhaps it is time to come in out of the dark.. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
my friend sometimes we have to let our lives change so maybe if you can make it to the light and i'll still control the underworld. LOL. well this is on eof your best poems i've read yet and i hope to read more like it soon so do keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Great poem...great hope for all who stumble in darkness. Hardrock |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
I love it! Wonderful writing. Dee |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
A very vivid reminder of how dark and lonely that path can be. Very nice read. |
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jezz_micah New Member
since 2000-06-30
Posts 8 |
Hey Cat, I really enjoyed reading your poem.. i know how it feels to be in love with someone, and not being able to be with them. your poem really expressed your feelings, and mine at the time too. keep writting.. ~Jessica~ |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is a beautiful poem! You have my vote |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
Oh, how I did love this one. And what an ending. TCB LarBear |
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