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I Will be Your Eve......
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I Will be Your Eve...... |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
It has happened I must make it last. The thing I thought I'd never do, I fell, I fell in love with you. In love, ahh just the thought is so foreign and grossly un-like me I want, I want to feel you to feel the warmth I have been so long without not knowing dizzied by the drought. So, I beg, make it last. Just once, for me forget the past. And the future too, who really cares? We are young and should not hold worry under our tongues. To taste the fruit, its nectar sweet and alien, it is so good to eat. So taste, my dear and simply breathe you are my Adam I am your Eve. |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
you have a beautiful use of words...i loved the last stanza. if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
A lovely poem! Is it for anyone in particular? Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, I love this. What a nice poem to express the beginning of a relationship. I hope it brings all those promises to you. Love the title and the last stanza also. Great idea and usage. "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Really liked this one! Great poem  |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
This is really good! I like the way you showed hesitation at the beggining, then had the speaker "give in" to her feelings of love. Great job! |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
thanks for the replies ^_^ and yes lotharingia, it is for someone in particular..... |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Loved it! Great expression. Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well written, great use of the Adam and Eve metaphor, and the last stanza is beautiful! This has my vote Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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