Dark Poetry #2 |
Darkness Comes |
Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Darkness Comes 5-7-5 The end draws so nigh This bright winters day it's clear- darkness must come soon < !signature--> Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 07-07-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~One word,...Haunting. Well done here. Thank you for sharing. *Peace. |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
I agree with SpitFire....haunting. Curious...the 5-7-5 in the title? Care to explain? Hardrock |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thank you both for the kind words. Hardrock-- the 5-7-5 is to indicate that it is written in the Haiku form of Poetry... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
We all have a dark side....how far willit take us? Good stuff! ~Sash~ |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
wow. |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
wow. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
impressive. very. *shudder* Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
every good poem its good to know someone else in the dark side knows haiku now i can share it in here. enjoyed the read I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Oooooh, Haiku! I like it, beautiful, haunting....... |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Ohhhh! Pretty haiku........... I have respect for people who stick by traditional forms, becase I know I would never have the patiance for it! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jamie . . . Great haiku my friend. Simple yet it speaks volumes. Great writing. LW Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The generous words of encouragement are much appreciated. Thanks to each of you. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, Wow you are on a roll sweet one Loved it! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thank you ever so much Maree. You constantly buoy my spirits. hmmm no pun intended angel...lol Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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