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SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

0 posted 2000-07-04 11:52 PM

In the Light of the Road

Spinning in the light of the road,
hearing her song being echoed.
She's slipping for the scent.

Racing with the storms past,
trying to catch up too fast.
She's skipping through her dreams.

Single footed hops on by,
smiling up to the sky.
Twirling for the moon.

She dances with the driver's coat,
her thoughts seeping begin to float.
She's singing for the wind.

She's spinning in the light of the road,
stepped into the defense mode.
She's kissing you goodbye.

[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 07-04-2000).]

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

1 posted 2000-07-05 12:15 PM

And she's got one hand in her pocket and with the other one she's waving goodby....Spitfire, I really like this. It has a kind of Alanis Morrisette feel to it. Beautiful imagery here. Hardrock

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

2 posted 2000-07-05 05:38 AM

I really like this one too. It's great

Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

3 posted 2000-07-05 07:27 AM

I felt a sense of freedom reading this, a vivid image, excellent poem!!!

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

4 posted 2000-07-05 09:20 AM

I just had to come back to this one again...I just really, really like it. I can just see her there....spinning, dancing, smiling...then a quick kiss goodby..."dancing with the driver's coat"...such an image. This is great, SpitFire. Hardrock

G. A. Webb
Member

since 2000-01-21

Posts 441
Stanton, California, USA

5 posted 2000-07-05 09:44 AM

Bravo SpitFire! Very well done. I especially liked the twist at in end with the good bye. That sent a chill down my spine. Again, well done thanks for sharing this.

G

Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

demoninlove
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 211
Dehradun

6 posted 2000-07-05 10:55 AM

Forgive me for being naive - but Spitfire - who is "She"? I dont seem to be able to get the exact meaning which I KNOW you have artfully concealed within the lines.
Deepak

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

7 posted 2000-07-05 01:56 PM

~Well,..."she" would be me. hehe. Uuummm,...as for the meaning??? Well, it's all there pretty much. Smiling and dancing in the road while at the same time trying to get over the storms of her past that are underneath the smiles, the driver's coat?...well I'll leave that untouched, but kissing goodbye is her letting go. Hope that helps,...most times things just fall out of my head and I try figuring out what it all means myself. haha. Thanks for reading. To everyone too....thank you. *Peace.

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

8 posted 2000-07-05 03:53 PM

this one was well enjoyed by me. i love the image it makes. do keep it up and hey your a great dancer.heehehehhee

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2000-07-05 10:45 PM

SF, I can see you there. Lovely images my friend. This was beautiful.

LW

Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility.
--William Wordsworth

Wren
Member

since 2000-07-05

Posts 312

10 posted 2000-07-06 11:16 AM

How beautiful! But why does she say goodbye? Thats so sad!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

11 posted 2000-07-06 11:26 AM

I agree with all the comments, especially GAW. Very nicely done. Enjoyed much.

jwesley

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

12 posted 2000-07-06 12:11 PM

Hi, I had missed this one too. (I get too catch up when I use the work computer..LOL)
Well, as everyone has said already, this was just great. Imagery very strong. I love all your poems.
Catalinamoon

"If a man moves you to feel like a woman,
the least you can do is let him."
Merrit Malloy

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