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The Coming - Part II
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The Coming - Part II |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road 
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The black beams just kept on coming relentless day on day And in the heavens an awesome humming the spectres watch their prey Within each beam the victims rise oblivious of their plight Torn from their graves and into the skies the end of their age-long night And the living; we could only watch We were like zombies too as the Spectres slowly took their catch And built their gruesome zoo |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Woah!!! (Can I hide under the bed tonight?!  LOL) Very scary! This means so much... I reckon this would be a good basis for a story or novel!!  |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Tara is right. When's the book coming out? This is really apocalyptic and weird. Superb! Anyway, there's nothing wrong with writing poems quickly (did you write this one in 15 min too?) if they turn out this good. You're obviously a genius I sometimes write my poems on the bus, but they always need massive editing afterwards.  Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this very much Allan!  |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
Thank you all... yes this one was fast too.. but it rarely happens that way - I'm no genius tho - i know that! the ideas are bubbling for the next part - fed by The Love Parade here in Vienna today - excessive & exstatic... anyway part three gets even darker i think (& stranger hopefully - i love a mystery!) thank you for tuning in! Allan |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
allan, scary stuff. Some really great dark images. much enjoyed. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Alan, this is a real scary story, and worded very effectively. And thanks for reading my rambling poem. For the record, no control issue, although hypnotism would not be a bad idea Catalinamoon |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
loved the work you should make a book out of it. can't wait to see part three. i'll be waiting. Jeremiah Johnson A/K/A The dark child. keep up your great work. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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