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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Once I dreamed, I was alone. Then you came, and we made a home. I dreamed of love, and a life together. I thought it was real, I dreamed it was forever. We were happy, or should I say I? You kept silent, and let our dream die. You shut me out, I couldn't see. I caused your pain? Please God,not me! I never knew, the depths of your pain. I couldn't hurt you, what would I gain? The pain was so great, it took your heart. How can I touch you, where can I start? I must be stll dreaming, surely it's not true. My dreams become saddness, if I can't be with you. Click |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Click,...oh so sad this one. Longing for answers,....too afraid to touch and ask. Hope everything is ok for you. Well written poem. I use this as an emotional outlet...you should too...helps a bit. Take care. *Peace. |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
I like your poem I sometimes shut the ones I love out when they hurt me but only because I dont always know how to express my feelings good Job Blue |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i really enjoy reading the way you put your words together. you have a rhythym that is very easy and flows naturally. very good work!! kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is so sad. And reminds us also that we should always communicate what we feel to our partners, if they don't know what we feel, is it a surprise they can't behave like we wish them to? < !signature--> Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland [This message has been edited by lotharingia (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
I really liked this poem. I hope things have gotten better for you  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"My dreams become sadness if I can't be with you." I too am waiting for that special one that shares the same dream as me..James |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I really liked this one! I know the feeling of being that guilty about something you've done to someone. It's a real heavy feeling! Good poem. |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Click~~I missed this one. Glad it came back up! Nice work here...Hope You are much better now. ~Sash~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
A heart wrenching poem, filled with sadness and longing... -Tier |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
You've captured this so well Click... sad and haunting. Take care. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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