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I Cried That Nite |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 
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~*Do You Feel It, Too?(A Dream)*~ by: Krissie S. Walking down a dark street. Cold wind drifting across my lips, Whispering forbidden dreams in my ears. A little mystery to taste... Black fog curling around my feet, Spreading across my way. Welcoming me with the breath of night. A pale moonbeam points out my direction. Till I reach the edge of nothing. Where the black meets regret. And over that edge I peer down, And wonder how far I'd fall... Or if I've already fallen... Then I sink to the bottom, Where nothing lives, Only remembers. A gentle hand holding up a shamed and broken face. A quivering lip left alone to cry. A confused heart... Take me away from this place, From the memories of something that never really happened. Sorry sounds so much like sorrow... "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is a beautiful poem. Sad, but beautiful. How well you express the feeling of standing at the edge of the abyss! I hope you are OK, though! Look after yourself! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I know Ive have been standing on the edge sometimes, I found meaning in your words. A wonderful verse, hope you are ok! |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Very good read, Krissi. Enjoyed it. Especially the lines, "where nothing lives, only remembers". It captures the essence of darkness so well. Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Krissi, this one really struck me. What a feeling that is, living on memory, and nothing else. And the imagery was glorious. Catalinamoon |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Thanx all of you and yes I am ok I just needed to get that out ^_~ "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Krissie,...hi there. Welcome here. I'm SpitFire  . Now, about this poem,...knowing that you are ok, let me say this. Wow!!! What a deliciously dark piece of poetry. Oooh, liked this lots. Take care. *Peace. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
first of all i voted. wonderful piece it was a great read and i hope to see more real soon I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Thanks so much for your replies and thanks for the vote Jeramiah! "I'm sorry for telling u love was unnecessary... making u lose ur way. I'm sure I'll be as sad as u feel." ~Touch and Go |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Anikay83 Very very imaginative. Awesome poem. Looking forward to reading your other poems. |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
Excellent poetry!! this is very good!! i adore your descriptions and symbolism....very dramatic and it gets the point across. i liked this one alot!! swampius maximus And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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