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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Falling helplessly into love, lust, limerance, (whatever it is). My feet are less stable, almost disconnected from the earth. I am a parachutist with a loose cord, a dancer with a fractured leg, a car with faulty brakes. Out of control, in danger, yet oddly happy. Spiraling toward the inevitable. I am falling faster now. Will you catch me? |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi catalinamoon, Awesome poetry here, so much enjoyed, thank you for sharing. Cerenity |
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**Tammy** Junior Member
since 2000-06-05
Posts 14 |
very enjoyable. it was very deep and moved me in away i can't understand. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
You express that feeling so well! Wonderful piece of work! I posted a poem with the same title in crit a while ago, but the content was completely different! Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Oh the enevitable!!! How often I have just known the place I was in may not be ideal, but kept going back, again this brings back alot of memories for me!!! Very Good Catalina |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
oh yes what great imagery and expression loved it so much. i to am falling but not in to love more like that damned place. sorry for the sad thought but i lived this way for a long time. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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LuckyinLove Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 57Australia |
Hey catalinamoon, how are you? I loved your poem I have one kinda like it I will post it next, I just wanted to say thanks for your incouragement, your kind words mean alot to me, LuckyinLove |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"I am a parachutist with a loose cord, a dancer with a fractured leg, a car with faulty brakes." perfect metaphors... you are a fine writer... keep doing things like this stanza in your writings... really good stuff |
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jerralynne Junior Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 11 |
tangible pictoral visceral! your imagery makes me feel & smile & i thank you ~ jerralynne |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
The bird with the broken wing is best able to teach about love. I loved this poem. Thanks for posting it. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I ditto Doreen on this one... great imagery... wonderful writing... regards, sudhir |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Way to go Cat! This ones super! What, no vote? Arrrggg! This one needs to be published! Great Job! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~"Out of control, in danger,yet oddly happy."...I can't explain how much sense that makes to me. Wow. Cat,...you in this writing have captured something so moving. Aaaah. Yup!!! Take care of you. *Peace. |
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Forrest Cain Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 306Chas.,W.V. USA |
Very well written and an enjoyable read. forrest |
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Forrest Cain Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 306Chas.,W.V. USA |
Very well written and an enjoyable read. forrest |
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