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Are you still what you were
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Are you still what you were |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
WHO ARE YOU? Who are you - I wonder? What are your eyes like? Does your frown split worlds asunder? What are your smiles like? When you laugh do your teeth flash Like inlaid marble on ruby lips? Does a glance from you the hopes dash Of yearning Gods longing for sips Of the nectar of the honeyed words you say While scattered around you they lie Prostrate - obeisance to you to pay For your one kind word and then to die Rather then let relentless ravages of time Wreak their inevitable havoc to wither The flower of their worship so sublime And scatter their precious memory thither As one day they will do to mine Who am too weak to let life go And cling to memory fragments of thine Oh! Are you still what you were - long ago? Deepak Menon |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
There exists a higher plane of existence....and Deepak has claimed it as his realm. Hardrock |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i really can't say much to this. it is a way of writing i long to be able to speak. thank you for being able to say it for me. this is a masterpiece here. kynder Across the gateway of my heart, I wrote "No Thoroughfare!!" But love came laughing by and Cried "I enter everywhere!!!" Herbert Shipman |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
I can only say DITTO to kynder's reply. I think it's a great piece. -Holly I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love all of the questions you ask here. i feel it is the main point and you develop it very well great writing and keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is a very beautiful poem. It's good to have positive memories of past love, as long as it doesn't stand in the way of future happiness. Lotharingia "For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?" Tom Holland |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
I too share in the responses, what a unique and wonderful way to express something, I look forward to more!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
That was beautiful, simply beautiful. And I think the ones we loved will always be the same in our heart Catalinamoon |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Deepak...now, who's the poet? Perhaps YOU have much to teach me... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
No - I have nothing to teach anyone - It is only that the canvass of human emotion is so vast - like your poem which was so very unique - like an ocean without end - no single human being can ever dream of experiencing even an iota of it's depths. In fact it is a humbling experience to read the poetry of others and often one is left with a feeling of inadequacy. And the inability to define what is poetry and what is not itself emphasises this point - does it not? But thank you very much all the same - I'll strive to live up to all the encouragement I have received. Deepak Menon |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Deepak, I just saw your work and enjoy it very much. I always appreciate more "formal" poetry. Regards, Rex It takes far less energy to love than to hate! |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
The relentless memories that rest in thee. I hope they bring you resting peace. For I see in your words a memory of that someone's world. If I'm wrong let me know it's a wonder through all we go. Loved to read this piece.  Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
You are not wrong Kevin - those restless memories storm through our existence leaving us trembling - semblances of our old selves... Deepak |
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