Dark Poetry #2 |
I Can Feel The Fire |
dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
*NOt sure about this one guys and gals, let me know what you think* I Can Feel The Fire My sun has deserted me, Leaving a gaping hole in my Skies, leaving nothing but smoke I can feel the heat as pain sears Me and my heart begins to wilt. Oh, lover, had I only known That yours were words so untrue Perhaps I would have been Prepared but my naivete’ got in The way and I feel it now. Never had I been able to Imagine that love could hurt So bad, and then I met you And history was made and I Am no longer naïve, nor Innocent. Fire burns the best of us, It scars and the smoke chokes And we learn to stay clear of fire But fire comes in many disguises. Joann Renee' Muszynski 1/5/01 With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
I think that it was good, maybe changing the ending a little would make it better but other than that i liked it "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN "There is no always forever, just this"-the cure |
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