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forever_unforgiven2
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since 2001-01-05
Posts 4


0 posted 2001-01-05 02:18 PM


Disfunctional

Can't you see them
When you close your eyes
When you know you're completely and utterly alone
When you're surrounded by a thousand faces and all
     you need is an ear
I don't seem to know how to feel
Sometimes I just want to kill
Breath escapes my open lungs
This numb body can't feel the tears
I've locked myself in my own comfusion
She's so close and yet knows the distance we hold
I'm so cold
I can't stand to be to close for to long
Stop smiling at me
I can't take it
I can't open myself this way
I'm trying to live her way
Just stop walking away
That's all everybody ever does
Walk away
You're giving me the option
I choose to stay
And be ignored
I'm torn and searching for that needle to sow me
    right
I'm in your cup you refuse to drink
I can't help tasting sour
The sugar just sunk to the bottom
Through neglected hours
Do I make you sad
Because anger's just an extension of sadness
And you're always mad
I'll take my blame
Can you tell me again that I'm a disgrace
That I'm this way
That this is my reputed face
Everyday I get closer to jumping off this jagged
    edge
Wouldn't make a difference if I was alive or dead
Chances are to close to slim
I've jumped in my own pool but I don't know how to
    swim
Your words speak louder than the truth
I know you don't believe in me
Just that she'll be what I never could
You would
If I'm so invisible then why are you still grasping
    my throat
I'm still trying to kill this fly that's buzzing
    around my brain
I've got this broken glass sifting through my vains
If you squeeze any harder
They'll penetrate from the inside out
Are you scared yet
Do you want out
I'm forcing myself through another day
I'm trying to not walk away
From everything
I'm to scared to come home
They'd never recognize me
I'm trying so hard to be what I should but shouldn't
    is just me
I'm sorry I can't forget
Your words are my regrets
I can't see through you
I'm not sure I want to
Disfunctional
Stained in my own blood
Deepening my own flood
I've kept this part of me from you
See my wrists
I know you'd look away
Sad but true
I'm so tall
I feel to small
I've been found guilty
Sinner
Killer
Winner from a cheater
From the remaining blood will grow my wings
And feel myself in slow motion falling
Falling
Disfunctionally
Falling



[This message has been edited by forever_unforgiven2 (edited 01-05-2001).]

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a_little_girl
Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307
San Alejandro, HI, USA
1 posted 2001-01-05 03:05 PM


Wow...this is some really great stuff. Welcome to Dark Passions.< !signature-->

**No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.**
~a_little_girl



[This message has been edited by a_little_girl (edited 01-05-2001).]

dragonpoe
Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
2 posted 2001-01-05 04:18 PM


very dark and painful. Gave me shivers

gave me shivers.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

DreamSeeker
Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72

3 posted 2001-01-05 06:30 PM


vertigos invitation
unanswered never
as the emptiness
crushes all breath
as to the pit
follows one in


The Song That Is Soul
It Reaches Defiant
Giving It In And Given
Calling All Souls Rise


Ginners
Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey
4 posted 2001-01-05 08:13 PM


my god this is amazing i really enjoyed reading it.  it gave me shivers and i lost my breath but it was amazing.  welcome to passions and please keep writing

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN
"There is no always forever, just this"-the cure

qtpieelmo
Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
5 posted 2001-01-05 10:52 PM


WOW! (I'm speechless) Well Welcome 2 Passions!! This is a great poem--It gave me the shivers because it hit too close to how I too often feel ~HUGS~   SMILE ("When you smile the whole world smiles with you, when you cry you cry alone!") LOVE ELMO <3
Deverone
Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136
San Antonio, Tx, USA
6 posted 2001-01-06 07:32 AM


...WHOAH....Extremely powerful, fantastic writting. This has such darkness to that most of us have felt; I don't think I could have put all that pure feeling in there no matter how hard I tried.

Waiting to read more of your works.....


Deverone

"We are cups, constantly and quietly being filled. The trick is, knowing how to tip ourselves over and let the beautiful stuff out".

--

BitterSmoke
Member
since 2001-01-02
Posts 54

7 posted 2001-01-07 03:29 AM



I can't help tasting sour
The sugar just sunk to the bottom

I am in awe.

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