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I Am Death In Dreams
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I Am Death In Dreams |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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I Am Death In Dreams I am death in dreams haunting screams, alive for hours of your reading. I stepped an inch across your space, I danced a twine around your face, a disgrace, a death, a senseless act in dreams or nightmares teasing, in time of blue stained skin, did you win? Was I sin or sued or asked to do, insane with weeks to go? You should know, the buzz by now, the followed how, the silkened brow. I fell inside a salted tear and brushed upon your death, hot whisper on my breath, a tickle past your way, today's the day, the only way, the death in dreams, I came unseen, I left untied and empty. Screeching wires, second liars, teeth clenched tires. I was your death, in dreams escaped, my mouth was taped, I ran the trace of secret space, I am the hidden face, the death, the dreams, the undone seams, I am the haunting screams. |
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*prevailing*darkness* Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36Port Richey, FL |
INTRIGUING. Incredibly intriguing. This kind of shows the process of ossification... and yet so much more than that. Very well written, and might I add, a small bit haunting.... Great work! *Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
OK, this is sounding a little depressed..Awesome, and yes haunting poem. I hope you are ok S |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
been peekin' in my head again?  coolies C |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Excellent write here! Keep up the great work  Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was really wonderful. the images were great and your wording was perfectly placed. nice job. jann elizabeth |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Wow...powerful piece...keep writing!! ~~My soul lives in love, walks with serenity, writhes in hatred, and dies in violence.~~ Myself |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Powerful stuff but this is only on a bad day I hope??  Isis< !signature--> *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. [This message has been edited by Isis (edited 12-28-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is excellent and yes very powerful. "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
interesting peice,i liked it and thought it was well written,bravo! sammi "All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon |
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michellemckee Junior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 49Tucson, AZ |
Wow send chills down my spine...have you been in my dreams? Terrific description of the terror inherent in our nightmares leaving us wrung out and wrought with fear! Life is not a spectator Sport! Dance like no one's watching. Love like it's never going to hurt. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
How often we have seen our dreaams die but then we know it is time to dream a new dream, fell inside a salted tear and brushed upon your death, hot whisper on my breath, a tickle past your way, Sweet dreams, loved the poem, < !signature--> In the morning I am a recluse,lost in memory,ideal situations and convulsions... They built pop mart for Bono so he could gaze out across the bay and sing about mountains maybe" Whipping boy [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 12-31-2000).] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I am the hidden face, the death, the dreams, the undone seams, I am the haunting screams. Wow! Peace to you my friend! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Fascinating poem! I like the imagery, and especially the wording. Good job here! |
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