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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia 
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I'm falling out of love today "That's impossible!" you might say? Real as the ice pumping through my veins and frozen tears wielding crimson stains Rivulets of you seep from my skin A precious numbing ache begins Withering under December frost Fragile blooms did try, yet lost But wait! Real love would never leave Only in fairy tales some believe Not in this world of glacial rime Whose edges sever time after time Til all that remains is a pathetic wish Crushed by inclement fingertips No more to hurt, No more to plead You've brought me to my frozen knees Where frigid lips can somehow say, I'm falling out of love today.. Sheila *I borrowed the title from Stevie Ray Vaughn.. but it seemed an apt one.  [This message has been edited by firecrakker (edited 12-18-2000).] |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Ohhhhhhhhhh Sheila, this was excellent! So well put and it flowed so beautifully. And yeah I know falling outta love can happen. Too much pain and sorrow can really put a damper on things. Great expressions here, Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Hey Sheila ... This is good ... GOOD. I really like your style of work , esp the imagery u use ... Very very potent. Great poem! ~verve |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
That was a great poem. I am even colder now than when i started reading it. I better get a sweater lol.Very expressive words.Suzanne |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well done great expression. Hope you warm up soon.. Merry Christmas Isis *I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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MysticWonders Member
since 2000-12-11
Posts 60Massapequa NY |
Loved this one! *S* Danyel |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
I like the frozen, cold essence of this piece, puts a chilly feel to it. Well done. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Mags - How true, how true .. now if only hearts could follow heads...*sigh - thank you for your kind words.Verve - Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked this. Suzanne - *hands you a sweater! Thank you for reading. Isis - Thank you, also, for commenting. (I'm warming up, nicely, thanks!! )Mystic - I'm glad you enjoyed it.. Thanks for commenting *and regarding your write, Verve is absolutely right!  dragonpoe - Thank you for your comments, here.. I am a big fan of your work and your opinion of mine is very encouraging Merry Christmas, all! Sheila |
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