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Xeonox
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0 posted 2000-12-13 01:34 AM


Seize my soul and burn it down,

Liquefied my essence and mold it away,

Rip my hope and take the threads,

Choke my innocence and watch it cleave,

Take it all for you lost yours.



Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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LM
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1 posted 2000-12-13 08:02 AM


Wheeeeeeew!!!
Loved it, including the surprising ending!

Verve
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2 posted 2000-12-14 11:58 AM



Heh ... Really dig the imagery in those lines ...
Short, simple but powerful.


~verve

brian madden
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3 posted 2000-12-14 05:46 PM


a powerful hitting poem.

"an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree
the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women".
Patti Smith

Xeonox
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4 posted 2000-12-28 02:00 AM


Thanks for the responses people.

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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5 posted 2000-12-28 11:45 AM


the ending kinda sent shivers down my spine. Very very powerful, a good read indeed!!

*Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.*

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6 posted 2000-12-28 06:49 PM


Very very interesting.....one of tose poems you have to sit back and mull over,well done.

swampo


"All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon

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7 posted 2000-12-28 08:04 PM


i could feel the pain on that one, and how it can tear away from one with madness.
Isis
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8 posted 2000-12-28 08:52 PM


What a wonderful ending.  You've answered the whole thing.   They CAN take a little from you for YOU are strong and sure of yourself, they have nothing and need all they can get.
Those people are the saddest ones known to mankind...
Isis

*The heart of education is the education of the heart...*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.


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