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You've lost yours |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA 
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Seize my soul and burn it down, Liquefied my essence and mold it away, Rip my hope and take the threads, Choke my innocence and watch it cleave, Take it all for you lost yours. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wheeeeeeew!!! Loved it, including the surprising ending! |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Heh ... Really dig the imagery in those lines ... Short, simple but powerful. ~verve |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a powerful hitting poem. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Thanks for the responses people. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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*prevailing*darkness* Junior Member
since 2000-12-18
Posts 36Port Richey, FL |
the ending kinda sent shivers down my spine. Very very powerful, a good read indeed!! *Always do right. This will gratify some people and astonish the rest.* |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
Very very interesting.....one of tose poems you have to sit back and mull over,well done. swampo "All art is an expression of pain."~John Lennon |
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CitiZen-One Member
since 2000-09-22
Posts 84New Mexico |
i could feel the pain on that one, and how it can tear away from one with madness. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
What a wonderful ending. You've answered the whole thing. They CAN take a little from you for YOU are strong and sure of yourself, they have nothing and need all they can get. Those people are the saddest ones known to mankind... Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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