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MysticWonders Member
since 2000-12-11
Posts 60Massapequa NY |
Wondering thoughts scattered In my head... Visions of past Loves Now arising from the Dead.. Standing before you Your mind in a twirl, Wondering if you should go and Take the fall.. He tells you to call him at Nine on the dot... To then meet up with him In a Dark secluded spot Is one night of Lost passion Plaiged with such lust Worth losing the only man you Call your true love You pick up the phone Go to Dial the digits You then slam it down hard What am i thinking? You turn to see you loved ones Picture And think to yourself At the snap of a finger, Lust can over rides one's future  If you won't be true to yourself ...You won't be true to others :( |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Oh wow!! Loved the meaning behind this one! Applause to you!!!  Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
MW...So true, so true. A moments pleasure, a lifetime of regret. Nicely done. Hardrock |
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MysticWonders Member
since 2000-12-11
Posts 60Massapequa NY |
Thanks for you kind words..I was nervous at first to post anything that i wrote...but someone told me once to just write from the heart and what you are feeling and you will never fail*S* It was nice to see the nice responses tha you gave to me*S* it gave me courage to write more! Thank you! If you can't be true to yourself...you won't be true to others :( |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
welcome to passions..hope you enjoy as much as we do ..enjoyed reading your words.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Most of what we write here we can all somewhat relate to and this is no exception. However, I would start following your rhyme scheme then the rhythm would be broken. You need to adopt a rhythm you'll use in every poem and don't deviate from it during the course of that particular poem, otherwise, great work. "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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PureM Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22London, UK |
Well done, i like the meaning behind this... from personal experience I know the damage that lust can do... welcome! i look forward to reading more and keep writing from the heart, you can't go wrong - just express!Matt |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, what a statement! So true, and yet so hard to follow the right advice when you are in the middle of the feelings. Sandra |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Welcome to DP... I enjoyed this read. I'd be interested in knowing the outcome of this poem. While it makes sense on paper, the feelings are sometimes harder to convince. Great write! Sheila |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...I have been pulled many ways by my desire...relationships definately can be destroyed by betrayal...James |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
That last line packs a whollop!! "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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