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PureM Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22London, UK |
*When I look into your eyes, emotions rise, my heart flies, i find surprise... ~feel feelings I can't disguise~ ...When I look into your eyes* M |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
A big welcome to Dark Passions!  I love this! Short, sweet - and says oh so much! Beautiful... ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Again, welcome. What a debut you've made! Good work on the rhyming. Keeps the reader always focused on the subject of the eyes, through the 'ise' sound at the end of each line. Good work. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I agree, a great entrance! welcome! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Welcome to dark passions! You've done very well so far ! Look forward to reading more.Sheila |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Welcome to Dark Passions!! This one was short YET so to the point! Great work! DkW No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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PureM Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22London, UK |
Thanks everyone for making me feel welcome! I don't write very often and I feel I have much to learn about this wonderful way of expression... but when I do write it is always what is in my heart. Thanks again Tara, EagleOne, Fractal, Sheila & DkW! Take care, and I'm really enjoying reading everyone else's poems. Mat [This message has been edited by PureM (edited 11-24-2000).] |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Loads of passion in a few short lines, enjoyed reading this... *smiles* -Tier |
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