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Dark Poetry #2
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firecrakker
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since 2000-10-20
Posts 235
Virginia

0 posted 2000-11-19 01:49 PM


A resounding slam echoes through this hollow chamber
Sealing with finality fates ludicrous pursuit
Remnants of tattered cardial velvet lay strewn
Decimated by the onslaught of passions truth
Unsteady hands mend her chain of mail
Lacerated by tempered words of steel
Discerning between reality and illusion
Has painted his paradoxical heart unreal
Anguish girds her in anonymity
Invisible, guarded from pillaging temptation
A breastplate forged in heathen fire
Shields rejection's abhoration
Insecurity's helmet muffles fantasy's prose
Eclipsed behind blackened cape of fear
Disgraced, she rides from the battle's throes
Where the cry of defeat she'll no longer hear



[This message has been edited by firecrakker (edited 11-19-2000).]

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OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa
1 posted 2000-11-19 10:56 PM


Delicious use of words and great imagery and description, I'm not sur I would have gone into ryme for the last few lines, I think the free form works alot better. Thanks for sharing.

Regards,
Olias

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
2 posted 2000-11-20 10:15 PM


Love this. Title, I have no clue either  
Great images,
Sandra


Hardrock
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA
3 posted 2000-12-12 11:48 PM


My mind ran the gamut on this one...everything from Joan of Arc to Xena, Warrior Princess.  As for title, all I could think of was Love Warrior Defeated.  I liked it.  Hardrock
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