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Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

0 posted 2000-11-17 12:41 PM


i know you've been hurt
and i know you can't trust
and i know you don't want to make those mistakes
again
because you have let yourself  believe
that this time
it would be your fault.

i know that you're scared
and i know that you're new at this
and i know that you're not as new as you would like to be

but neither am i

i know that i love every moment
and i know that i love every touch
and i know that i love everthing i have learned of you

you have confessed this, too

i know that you are afraid of being crushed
and i know that i am afraid of being crushed
and i know that in the moment of utterance,
we leave ourslves open to being crushed

but i know, i would never crush you

so say it

say it
and i will say it to you
and i will say it with you
and we will say it together

please

i love you



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Dark_kisses_Within
Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680
Kansas
1 posted 2000-11-17 12:45 PM


WOW!! This was so heart wrenching.  I could feel your plea and it was  so beautiful.  
Great work,
DkW


No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry


dragonpoe
Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida
2 posted 2000-11-17 01:22 PM


Just add a violin and a piano and maybe an acoustic guitar, and you got yourself a wonderful song! I am green with envy! I love music but I can't ever seem to write anything that would befit music *sigh*
Oh well, as long as there are poets like you around, I can still enjoy  

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

3 posted 2000-11-17 03:53 PM


Whoa!  What a beautiful poem!  I like it!  Good work.
Jannel
Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA
4 posted 2000-11-17 04:59 PM


thank you all very much for your kind words. you know how it feels, when you know that you both want to say it, but you're both too  stubborn or scared? *sigh*. here's to love...

jann elizabeth

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