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Just one More Night...
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Just one More Night... |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470
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The plan was so simple We said our goodbye Our time now is up Alone, I will cry You walked away And found someone new It doesn’t work, I promise Because I tried it too A late night visit A knock at the door Inside your dream We met once more We claim it was wrong But it felt so right Like our bodies belonged Together in the night Our words have been spoken Nothing more left to say We did what was natural Then I walked away I don’t want you back In the web that we weave I will tell you the truth You will not be deceived I don’t want to talk No drama no fights I just want to lay with you And do what feels right I will tell you my secrets And we’ll laugh till we cry I need my best friend back I think we should try With no promise of tomorrow We’ll hold on for just today When we lose what makes this special That’s when we’ll walk away. "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
So bittersweet was this piece when I first read it.. You've painted a picture of a love so fragile.  ..I would hope that if it's true, the one more nights would never end. Beautifully done!Sheila |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
Gosh ... this does ring so true ... I must say, this is a really great piece of work ... I simply love it. ~Verve |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, this is a beauty, you know I COULD say, I feel just like this, exactly, but I won't..HA HA I have to stop that. Awesome poem, such true emotion. Peace. Sandra |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
I will tell you my secrets And we’ll laugh till we cry I need my best friend back I think we should try If it was that easy for me I think I would have the person I called my best friend, back. Thank you for sharing this amazing piece. ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
LL~ this is heartfelt and I really liked this. -SEA |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I love your poems. I do very much. You are from heaven. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Lady Lost, Wow, I think we all could have written this one together. However you said it so beautifully. I would venture to say that we have all been caught up in something like this... doing something we know is actually wrong, but feels so right, only to know there's no destiny...however wishing, wanting, desiring. Great work here, it hit home. Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
THIS WAS BEAUTIFUL..I LUVED IT |
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CourtneyNdremeda Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 15 |
"I will tell you my secrets And we’ll laugh till we cry I need my best friend back I think we should try ...When we lose what makes this special That’s when we’ll walk away" I swear your poem moved me to tears. I had a best friend [who i consequently fell in love with], he would talk to me about my secrets, make me see that i wasn't a failure.. and then something took him away, somehow that special thing was gone. and i'm painfully trying to limp away. sorry, i'm sure thats more info than any of u wanted to hear... my point was that [this sounds corny, BUT] i want to thank you for writing this, because it rings so true to me... love, Ipek |
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