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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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What abomination is this, which seeks to torture me, to make me hear again "our" song? (the one I always played while you ravished me.) I am forced back in time, There is my bed, the scarlet comforter where you laid me down, Picasso's "Blue Nude" on this wall, your "Blue Moon" on the other. You were my artist. You painted landscapes on my heart, colored the blank spaces with amethyst passion, always roaming just a bit outside the lines. Precisely imprecise. Your tongue, a fine tipped brush dipped in gold, inscribed my body. I could not have desired more. And now my memories are tinted with a black and blue bruising of the soul, reality distorted into a collage of angry red fragments. Your talents and my love lie wasted on an overturned canvas. |
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mojar Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 169granbury, texas, usa |
very nice work, almost as if i were there. love it, mojar |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Catalinamoon, You have painted on paper, the bruising your heart and soul have had to endure, I have heard that the heart will mend, and I wish you only the very best. Simply wonderful work. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Wow Sandra! This really realed me in... but then, not too hard when you wrote about this so well. I could actually see the overturned canvas... you take care  ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
You have painted a picture for me, one that I painfully recognize. Great post. .....beth |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Sandra.....Excellent; very well done. Sad but beautiful imagery. The pain of unrequited love is so unique, is it not? Best regards. |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
Sandra, Such beautiful imagery to paint such a painful topic. I share the opinion of those before me... great work, here. Sheila |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
sandra the imagery you potrayed is spectacular, being an artist I read so much into the depths of this, I've added it to my library. the pain is so well expressed. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Verve Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 348Singapore |
I do agree ... this is great imagery ... ~Verve |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~You know what,...I'm glad that Rex still visits you. That he's still around this place. You know? Anyway,...Sandra, where do I start with this one? I absolutely loved the portrait you painted with your words. This felt so alive, and then crashes at the end. You know,...you just walked me through so many things underneath this. We'll talk. Awesome write you. I really love the artist theme. *Peace Sweets. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
I am just another to say "Great Imagery!" it was superb, with your use of colors (I love using colors in writing) it paints a picture not just in the mind, but in the heart. |
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CourtneyNdremeda Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 15 |
Straight to the heart... like everyone else, i have to say the imagery, the skill with which u used words to paint ur portrait, is supurb. love, Ipek (thanks for the help with how to edit messeges.. )[This message has been edited by CourtneyNdremeda (edited 11-15-2000).] |
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CourtneyNdremeda Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 15 |
oh, and sorry for the obnoxious icon...i didn't mean to use that one : ) love Ipek |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sandra - this is evocatively sad...love the line: 'You painted landscapes on my heart' Wonderful writing.. K A note to Courtney - if you want to edit your icon or any of your text just go to the edit button which is the icon that looks like a notepad with a pen. Change what you want, make sure your password is in etc and click submit. < !signature--> The wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 11-14-2000).] |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this is beautifully and sadly sensual. i really enjoyed reading it. epsecially the comparison of the tongue to a brush. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them. -1984 |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
As Ron said I could see a lovely painting too Sandra...nicely written indeed hon. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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