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Answering Ambrosia (To the Child of the Sea)
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Answering Ambrosia (To the Child of the Sea) |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
Where Ambrosia rests her soft curls No longer can matter No longer will she sleep beside me You fail to pulsate within me You fail to radiate dayglow You fail Never again will I pause In that sacred spot where my head meets The softness below your clavicle Even if ivory raindrops Could fall from bright blue eyes And land on my head I would only wait And watch you stare down your sunsets Ready for that violent burst I, curled in silken lavender Holding a strange sort of angel I will pray (I never pray) That you will recede from this shore gently That only days will pass That ending is beginning And beginnings never end |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
That ending is beginning And beginnings never end I hope this prayer is answered for all who need it {{huggz}} ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Such wonderful thoughts throughout this whole poem especially the ending! I loved it!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
It is a wonderfully written poem, with hope greatly expressed. and sometimes we can only hope. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
'You fail' I like the succint placing of these two words that say so much. It is all a cycle isn't it? All in all, a well-wrought piece of work Jannel.  KThe wind shifts like this: Like a human without illusions... This is how the wind shifts: Like a human, heavy and heavy, Who does not care. W.S |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Jannel,...what a treasure this piece is! So glad that I came in. You know,...the overall tone and placing of the words completes this with a wrapping and a bow. It's beautiful the images you formed with your words. This here, is a poem I'll read again for sure. *Peace. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
thank you all very much. this is very close to me right now. i recenlty stopped dating someone, but we stayed close, and now that i am seeing someone else, i feel that we have lost the connection that we had that was so wonderful that i thought transcended our dating. this is for him. jann elizabeth |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Your words were just beautiful here. Awesome, really. Sandra |
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