Dark Poetry #2 |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Confusion infects my breath of wind, turning my beaten head in a spin. The urge burns through like liquid fire, Undulating, completely drowned in my desire. Your stare penetrating Your smile captivating Me sighing patiently waiting Yes, that's my heart quietly aching Your touch unknown Your offer condoned Be gentle I'm easily thrown The light surrounds you always a different tone But today just a bit... I feel sad just a bit... ...I'm sorry... I'm always looking your way. Like a reflex, my heart turns my eyes in your direction. I want to be mysterious. Dark and soulful. Something new and unexplainable. But my heart is made of glass. You can see right through me. You always look right through me... You stutter my rhythm, ruin my rhyme. You could never know the pain I create, could never appreciate the mercy I see. I could love you better than this. Better than a few lonely words, scribbled down in a fit of sadness. But tomorrow more than just a bit... I feel sad Didn't you know it? Sorry...yeah, I'm sorry Much love all, Krissie ~*Those words... Oh, how I long to hear ...those words Tell me...*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krissie, this is so sad and haunting, an excellent collage of thoughts. Be well kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Krissie... your poem is indeed a wonderful collage of expression Really touched me. Take care ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Kethry & taramw~ "It's like cut and glue- me to you." Sometimes all the thoughts don't rhyme, they kinda just come out in pieces. Thanks for the kind words. Much love all, Krissie ~*Those words... Oh, how I long to hear ...those words Tell me...*~ |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
"You could never know the pain I create, could never appreciate the mercy I see. I could love you better than this. Better than a few lonely words, scribbled down in a fit of sadness." WOW!!!!!! This one really caught me. You said so many things I have felt and experienced myself, in such a unique and expressive way. Full of imagery.....I loved it! Thanks for the awesome read! [This message has been edited by Illusion (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
A beautiful emotional collage of thoughts, feelings and desires. It doesn't have to rhyme you know. It all came together beautifully Isis *I believe every time you put your words to paper, you change. Each feeling is set free, and you may follow.....* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Sp |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
I usually have a hard time keeping a rhyme going. My thoughts just break up in so many different directions. Thanks for replying. Much love all, Krissie ~*Those words... Oh, how I long to hear ...those words Tell me...*~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Krissie, this is wonderful, expressive, flows well, and once again, someone has been watching my life go by! Isn't it interesting how so many of us have the same feelings, the same uncertainties, and the same pain? Though we all state it slightly differently. Take care. Sandra |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Thanks for the kind words. I find it so much easier to identify with another's pain, than their joy. I guess that's something special, to be reserved as individual for each... Much love all, Krissie |
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