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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... 
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The tears rain down Flooding through my soul Washing away the pain Leaving only loneliness The empty shell of a man A man I thought I could be "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hey, this is fabulous  Short and sharp... says a lot with so few words... take care!~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i like this Eddie..very nice.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
hmmm, this is sad... but i really like the way you used the words. they fit nicely. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whetever, you've beaten them. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
hhmmmm - Interesting poem. I see much in here and the possibility for expansion. I like the implied hopelessness that can be felt... our emotions can definitely overrule our logic at times. Bravo. Christopher |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
The man you could be or wanna be??? YOU must be the change you want to see in the world or in yourself. Wonderful descriptions of the depths of hopelessness hon.. Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
taramw.....Thanks for stoppig by. Short and sharp, I think so too. As for good or bad, I leave that up to others to judge! I'm glad you enjoyed! Victoria....It's always nice to know that you liked my ramblings, thanks! jann elizabeth......I was pretty sad when I wrote the words so I guess I have succeded in my expression. Thanks for reading and your comments. Christopher...you are perceptive, as always. I too feel there was more to add, in a way though I hope I don't finish it. When the emotions are in full flight logic has little say in things. Thankyou for your valued comment. Isis.....The man I could be, wanna be, am! sometimes it is all just a blur. I know your words are true but when you reach those depths it's hard to stay positive. I appreciate your time. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh no, another person feeling so sad and lonely. Good thing we can all dump it out here. I think you will feel more like you again soon. I can surely understand that blank, empty state. Take care. Sandra |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Heartfelt emotion. Geez...I'm gonna have to buy you a beer for those tears. All in all...well said...Been there. |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Eddie, it's amazing how so few words can be effective, well said. I can understand this one totally. Dee |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Sandra......The need to express the emotions is overwhelming sometimes. It's been so long I'm not sure what "me" feels like anymore. Ron.....Beer and tears are a bad combination. I think far too many have "been there". Dee...I think words from the heart are always effective. I'm soory that you have experienced these feelings, take care! Thanks too you all for your concern and friendship, it is appreciated! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
I can relate to this from a woman's perspective. You put it into words so wonderfully mournful. I enjoyed the feeling of this poem very much. Thanks for sharing! |
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