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The Coldness Inside
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The Coldness Inside |
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For_Never Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 125Cincinnati, oh, United States of America |
And too often I turn..away.. < !signature-->from the pain and confusion.. and those thoughts they stray from my emptied insides... I am worn from the actions.. the action I take.. Well oiled for percision well sharpend in pain.. All too often I find my mind painfully perceptive.. cutting those line.. of sanity withdrawn Some find it nice.. to take it all in.. Some like to tastethe spices of life... and to those who wonder whats over the next horizen. Oh, they shall find..more horizens to find Edward A. Beerman 10-24-00 "..Hello...is there anyone out there?..." Pink Floyd [This message has been edited by For_Never (edited 10-24-2000).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great poem. I've enjoyed the piece.  Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Another enjoyable read my perceptive friend, drop me an email if you like my icq is sick.. Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Liked this! Ending was great! "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
i enjoyed this, especially the last two lines of the second section. well oiled...well sharpened. very nice. jann elizabeth If you can feel that staying human is worthwhile, even when it can't have any result whatever, you've beaten them. -1984 |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Well done - I like the switch from the traditional rhyme scheme! Christopher |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
I am worn from the actions.. the action I take.. Well oiled for percision well sharpend in pain.. great choices of words. love it. |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
That was very good .I have felt " emptied insides" Suzanne |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
hey great job! ive felt like this as well n i liked how u put it to words its kinda like my poem "frost" hehe...keep it up! Misery Divine |
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