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So close but Yet so Far (our little secret)... |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470
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Can a person feel the heat From a flame they've never seen? Can you really touch the face... Of someone on a movie screen? Have you ever dreamt A dream that was so real? Never wanting to wake up... From a fantasy you could feel Have you tasted the kiss From lips you cannot see? Feeling the breath of a lover Who isn't yet a reality? Did you ever feel so close To something so far away Knowing they will be there When you wake up one day... Have you ever heard a voice That was like a sweet symphony? Have you dreamt of their arms? Where you long to be... I have. "And I still believe you can never have too much fiction because reality is such a bore..." - REA |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Beth...Excellent!!! Great subject, well done, perfect rhyming...very good work here. Plus, the theme really grips you. I like it!! Hardrock |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh yeah, I sure have... Good one. Sandra |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
A perfect summation Beth - From the first line to the very last, and all between... I have felt and I understand. Poignant feelings, loving thoughts and a hint of painful longing. Nothing bad can be said about this. I too have touched my screen, wishing the face on the other side would materialize beneath my fingers, so I could caress and feel the reality... Peaceful smiles... C |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Yep, dreamt that too  Lovely poem "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Dedreia Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 172Kokomo, Indiana, United States |
Oh yes my dear I have...there is nothing like it in the world. Good writing. Dee "It doesn't matter who you love, or how you love, but that you love" Rod McKuen |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Dreams, schemes or plans all a joy to behold. Never lose the ability to dream. Great work hon Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
YES, YES, YES......FELT IT ALL! But you put it into words so wonderfully! This was a great work. I enjoyed it very much, especially the mild (yet screaming out!) "sense of desperation" this gave off. Thanks for sharing. |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Wow, great piece of work and it perfectly describes something we all feel at times. I really enjoyed reading it. It was simple, yet intriguing. =)< !signature--> "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." [This message has been edited by Words_of_Glitter (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
to dream of a touch, a scent, a kiss so light, to be held so close, throughout the night, to awaken at morning, at a new days door, awaiting night, to dream some more. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Sorry I am late in replying. I always want to be the first one to reply but I cannot. I love your writings. Amazing as always. Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.) |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
YES! What more can I say but great work! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Night Chica Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 39Vermont |
Oh wow...this was an awesome poem! I think we have all felt these feelings before... And the way you portray them is excellent. Megs I was never one to patiently pick up broken fragments and glue them together again and tell myself that the mended whole was as good as new. What is broken is broken- and I'd rather remember it as it was at its best than mend it and see the broken places as long as I lived. -- Margaret Mitchell |
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