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RE: Just One Night....
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RE: Just One Night.... |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia 
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Hardrock.. forgive me my poetic injustice, but I felt the need to share the other side of this picture..  Echoes follow your footsteps Outside my bedroom door.. Wishing you would stay with me Just one more hour Only fading steps.. The latch clicks behind you You are gone. Never to return.. I lie here, in soft down covers Alone, awake Inhaling the remnants of passion spent buried in my skin.. my sheets To afraid to open my eyes and speak To call you back to my warmth.. Staring from my fourth floor window Your taste alive on my lips.. So sweet, still Searching the cold, damn night For one more glimpse of you... Silently pondering the darkness to the kitchen door... A cool drink of water A nervous cigarette And memories of this night to hold me until the next... He didn't even ask my name... [This message has been edited by firecrakker (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
firecrakker, this depicts a one night stand so excellently. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome. I had the same thoughts in response when I read that poem the first time. It's amazing, isn't it? Love your writing. Sandra |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Excellent. The last verse particularly really 'got' me - what an atmosphere... Oh and these two lines: Staring from my fourth floor window Your taste alive on my lips.. they rock. K |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
'Crakker....Whoa!!! This is incredible. What a nice poem to accompany mine....they should be joined so you can't read one without the other. Totally different perspectives here on the same subject. The only "injustice" would be if you had chosen not to respond as you did. I love it. Hardrock |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
I am so glad you all enjoyed this turn, especially, you, Hardrock. This was your creation... I loved your concept.. and my mind went astray with what was wondered in yours. |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
this was nice. this point of view definitely needed to be heard, as well. jann elizabeth |
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