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What am I? |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I am in the wind the clouds the trees the humming lady bugs To me I am in the blood the mud the urine stained floor To you I am nothing but a body To you I am a soul who's uncomfortable with itself To me I'm only semi-good to me I am only nothing To you What am I? |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Joy, you are you, a young and blossoming writer, with a beautiful future. You are lots of things. And try not to care what someone elses opinion is. (I said try, I know its almost impossible) Peace Sandra / catalinamoon |
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Jannel Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 492Muncie, IN, USA |
the images are harsh, but in a good way. i completely admire the honesty of this piece. it sort of lays everything out on the table. great job. jann elizabeth |
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CrEaTuRe Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 260Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia |
Great piece of work ... it really hits the spot even if it harsh but the meaning is so right at times it makes us all wonder what do we mean to others..... Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
hard to know who or what you are. dont let anyone twist your idea of yourself. you are whole, not broken. i like your poem..ive felt this way at times.. shira |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Don't let anyone make you feel like your not even half the person you are or they are. People like them don't even deserve to be around you at all. keep ya head up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Be joyous like your name. You are a wonderful caring person, a great writer and those two alone is enough to start, but you have much more than that going for you. Don't allow ANYONE to make you feel this way hon, it is a useless circle of self loathing that only kills your self confidence, I've been there I know!! So please know you are much more than you portray here, also you are my friend and that in itself is worth a small smile!! *hugs* Isis *Good will towards all beings is the highest religion* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
What would I do without all of you here? Without this place? I don't visit as often as I should. I wrote this because at this point in my life I'm at a giant crossroads and am feeling lost and my self confidence is lost, as you can tell by this poem. Thanks for the vote of confidence and your support. That's really all I needed, some kind words. Thank you. All I really want is to be happy and make a difference in peoples lives. That's my goal right now. But first I have to get up from the dust to do that don't I? Sandra, Thank you for saying that. It means a lot. Jannel, Yes, I did lay it all out didn't I? Kind of like throwing myself out to the dogs, but I needed to get it out there. Thanks. Creature, I wonder too much I think at times about how others view me. I loose sight of how I view me. Shira, I'm trying to get whole again. I don't like being around people who "break" me. But right now I have no choie. It's hard. Acire, Again, I try to keep my distance from people who make me feel less than who I am. But every day I go to school and it's there and I can't hide from it. But I just enjoy my time away from there. Isis, being your friend is worth a smile, for you are one of the most caring people I've met, on and off line. Thanks for being there. Here's that smile.  Okay, too long of a reply. Bye ALL! Take care. Joy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Joy14, it's hard when your images of yourself don't match those others see,but it does make for good peotry as this is. Be well Kethry. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
I like the way you've written this one Take care! ~ Tara ~"A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
You will rise from that dust beautifully, because after all, we all came from it, and in that, we are so much more! Keep writing. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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